Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Few individuals belives accepting worst sutuation is better initiative, while others opine that, tackling such satuation with hard work aand constanting improving the satuation will have it's own benefits. In forthcoming paragraphs, I have discussed bothe view and the cluded my opinion at the end.
On the one hand, the satuation which are not incontrol of an individaul ablitily should be accepted with open arms. If an individual is encountering an medical emergences which is not in control, it is better to accept outcome of that satuation. This kind of satuation leaves an individual helpless and unable do anthing which benefits that satuation. For example, if an individaul's father is going under surgry, only thing an individual can do is expect ann postive outcome of that satuation
On the other hand, if an individual is finacialy unstable, which can easily counter by doing mutiple job simultaneously to improve it. In thos economy an individual's salary is unable to fullfill the needs of daily requirement, rather than getting feeling down, doing muliple jobs can give him finacial freedom. For example, a teacher's salary is not able to fulfill daily need, by taking extra classes or teching in multiple institude at once can increase the flow of money.
In my opinion, improving and hardwork is best possible way to counter this kind of satuation, by doing this it will directly effect on mental health. Individual itself try and impoving in this kind of satuation inreponcive of the result, it will give him an sence of satisfaction of performing best. For example, student who is acadamic score is average, but constant works hard and improve have show justification on their hardwork towards prepairation
To conclud, individual's repones toward statuation totaly depend upon the way that individual see it, which includs accepting when it is no in your control and working hard and improving when it's totaly upto you
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views—that of accepting bad situations and that of trying to improve them—and provides a clear personal opinion. Main ideas are presented, such as citing medical emergencies for acceptance and financial instability for taking action. However, the development of these ideas is limited and somewhat repetitive, and the examples given (such as a father going under surgery or a teacher taking extra classes) lack full extension and deeper analysis. Furthermore, there are numerous vocabulary and spelling errors that occasionally obscure the precise meaning of the arguments. Consequently, the response aligns best with Band 5.5 to 6.0 descriptors for Task Achievement, specifically fitting into a solid Band 5.5 due to under-developed examples and minor lapses in clarity.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay has a recognisable overall structure with an introduction, two body paragraphs exploring different views, a concluding opinion paragraph, and a brief final summary. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate distinct ideas. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward transitions, repetitive phrasing, and mechanical cohesive devices like 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand' which are sometimes misused. Referencing is occasionally unclear, as seen in pronoun usage ('it will have it's own benefits'). While the writing maintains an overall coherent arrangement, the frequent mechanical errors and clunky transitions prevent it from reaching a higher band, placing it firmly at Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student attempts a range of vocabulary suitable for the topic, including terms like 'financial freedom', 'simultaneously', and 'satisfaction'. However, there are numerous persistent spelling errors ('belives', 'worst sutuation', 'satuation', 'aand', 'bothe', 'includs', 'prepairation') and word-choice inaccuracies ('counter by doing mutiple job', 'expect ann postive outcome'). These errors restrict the vocabulary range and cause some difficulty for the reader, though communication is generally maintained. Because the range is limited and noticeable lexical errors occur frequently throughout the text, this performance corresponds to a Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, incorporating conditional structures ('If an individual is encountering...') and relative clauses. However, the text suffers from a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('Few individuals belives', 'student who is acadamic score is average'), missing articles, incorrect prepositions, and structural fragments ('This kind of satuation leaves an individual helpless and unable do anthing which benefits that satuation'). These frequent errors can cause strain and difficulty for the reader, meaning the majority of sentences are not error-free. This places the grammatical performance securely at a Band 5.0.
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