Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Nowadays, many people loose their hopes due to many reasons. Many of them try hard and want to succeeded but in some case they fail. Therefore in this way many people accept the bad situations. Moreover many of them do not accept his defeat and began to try hard to make them self successful.

In some cases many people are try to find better jobs to cover their home expenses soo they left their previous job to find a better job that provide much facilities and better salary. Moreover if they find not a suitable job for them they became anxious. They lost in his own thinks and they spent a lot of time in thinking about their future. Some of them accept their defeat. For instances many worker try to find better jobs or upper rank jobs to lives their life peacefully. But if they do not find it they became unsatisfied. And they believe this is his luck.

In this way many students loose their hopes when they saw this type of situation in their own family or with other relative person suffering from that case. For instance many students listen from their friends or by the other person you work hard or spend a lot of time on study but you never thought if you do not get a better employment than what you doo. Therefore after listing this many students loose their hopes and always try to find their better future instead of focusing on their education.

In the early age many adults realize that their family not have enough money therefore they try hard to help them and standing with them in any situations.

In my considered opinion, accept bad situation is not good way to better their future. They need to develop their hope again and try to find more better for surviving. But many of them are really right in his situations they work soo hard but they do not get a much money. Many employer thought to buy new products but they don't have enough money for this. In this way they became upset. I think company should provide a bonus to their employer at least one or twice a year. In this way they work with his satisfactions.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response attempts to discuss both views on accepting a bad situation versus trying to improve it, while including a personal opinion towards the end. However, the ideas lack clear development and extension. For example, the writer mentions that people leave jobs to find better ones and become anxious, but the reasoning remains superficial and disjointed. Furthermore, the discussion frequently drifts into related anecdotes or broad generalisations about students and workers without clearly weighing the merits of both perspectives. The personal opinion is stated in the conclusion ('accept bad situation is not good way to better their future'), but the overall task coverage is limited and under-developed, aligning best with a Band 5 descriptor.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression and overall coherence are frequently disrupted. While the writer attempts to use cohesive devices such as 'Therefore', 'Moreover', and 'For instance', they are often used repetitively or inaccurately, as seen in phrases like 'Therefore in this way many people accept the bad situations.' Paragraphing is attempted, but ideas within paragraphs do not flow smoothly, and referencing is often unclear, such as pronoun shifts ('their family... his situations'). There is no clear overall progression of argument, which is characteristic of a Band 5 performance.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent word choice and spelling errors (e.g., 'loose' instead of 'lose', 'succeeded' instead of 'succeed', 'him self', 'soo', 'thinks' instead of 'thoughts', 'listing' instead of 'listening'). The range is limited and minimally adequate for conveying simple ideas, but numerous errors in collocation and form (e.g., 'upper rank jobs', 'more better') cause strain for the reader. These issues place the lexical resource firmly at a Band 4 level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences are simple or poorly constructed attempts at complex forms that are marred by frequent errors. Examples include tense confusion, missing articles, and subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'many people loose', 'their family not have enough money', 'accept bad situation is not good way'). These errors are frequent and often impede meaning or require the reader to guess the intended message, which aligns with the descriptor for Band 4.

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