Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this current era of scientific and technological progress, we find ourselves in a modern world, where most of the people believes that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money, while others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations becomes topic of interest for people of the modern world.

It is crucial that different people have diverse perceptions, levels of understanding, and levels of intelligence reagrding the given statement. Both of then have valid arguments to support their opinion. We will discuss both people points of view in detail in upcomming paragraph.

According to me, their are two groups; Group-A, and Group-B. Community of group-A believes that sometimes we need to bear a loss to save an realtionship, money is not always important, however people of group-B believes that, they should always try to improve their source of income and try to find job of their interest, so they can perform more efficient in pacticle life.

In conclusion; i support the opinion of group-B, because human can learn in every age of his life and this process cannot be stop in every age factor. when you try to grow in any aspect of life you should have to improve your income to support your lifestyle, and never accept a situation in which you have to do unsatisfactory jobs to rum bread and butter for your family. Now a days we can learn skills online through different websites to increase income.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response addresses the task only partially. While the student acknowledges both views and presents a personal opinion in the conclusion, the ideas remain limited and under-developed. For instance, the introduction relies heavily on a lengthy, convoluted paraphrase of the prompt rather than a concise overview. In the body paragraphs, the discussion of the two viewpoints is overly generalized and lacks sufficient explanation or specific examples. The arguments presented for Group A and Group B are introduced superficially, such as mentioning 'bear a loss to save an relationship' or 'improve their source of income', but these points are not fully extended. To reach a higher level, the writer needs to explore both perspectives with greater depth and provide well-supported explanations for each side before stating a clearer position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is some basic organization with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, but the text lacks a clear overall progression. The use of cohesive devices is frequently mechanical, repetitive, or inaccurate, such as structuring the entire body around rigid self-invented categories ('Group-A, and Group-B') rather than natural argumentative flow. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal cohesion within paragraphs is weak. For example, the transition from the introductory outline to the body paragraphs feels disjointed, with phrases like 'We will discuss both people points of view in detail in upcomming paragraph.' To improve, the writer should employ a wider range of standard cohesive markers more naturally and ensure that each paragraph builds logically upon the previous one without relying on artificial group labels.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The lexical resource is limited and minimally adequate for the task. The vocabulary used is quite basic and repetitive, with noticeable errors in word choice, word form, and spelling that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. Examples include spelling errors like 'reagrding' and 'upcomming', as well as awkward collocations and word forms such as 'perform more efficient' instead of 'perform more efficiently', and 'rum bread and butter' instead of 'earn a living' or 'earn their bread and butter'. To achieve a higher band, the student must expand their vocabulary range, incorporate less common lexical items accurately, and pay closer attention to word forms and correct spellings.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response demonstrates a very limited range of sentence structures, relying mostly on simple or faulty complex sentences. There are frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('most of the people believes', 'their are two groups', 'process cannot be stop'), article usage, and punctuation. Attempts at complex structures often result in grammatical failure, such as run-on sentences and confusing clauses in the introduction and conclusion. Punctuation errors, such as the incorrect semicolon usage in 'In conclusion; i support', further detract from accuracy. To progress, the writer needs to develop a better command of basic grammatical rules, improve punctuation, and practice constructing error-free complex sentences.

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