Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

It is argued that some individual think that it is better to accept a worse situation of failure in finding employment or lack of money .On one hand other argue that it is benefical to try and enhance such situations .As far as i discuss both opinion but my am in favour of keep on trying until we succeded .

my first opinion about mt agreement is that ,job plays a very essential role in life of people . some people starts finding jobs without any experience it is not better for themfor instance some educated person applying for job their application was not accept they lose their heart or not trying to find another face lot of difficulty in daily affairs of life. it does not means that they stop finding employment .It is benefical for then to open their own small buiness or then established their on or doing partnership with other companies.

my second opinion about my agreement is that few student starts exploring jobs without completing studies much of their time wasted for instance if company higher student without education the company fall down shares .This is the cause of not having much occupations .one one hand if students neds job it is good for them to do small job first then apply for higher level of job .some old people also need job but with no power in their bodies work less or unable to have a job .thses type of people survive very poor life .

in conculsion , doing jobs is nessary part of life but it do not ignore study if indivduals study better they win the heart of employers or it is cruical to try try again until you not find jobs .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response addresses the prompt minimally, attempting to discuss both views on accepting or trying to improve difficult situations, such as a shortage of money or unsatisfactory employment. However, the position is not always clear, and the ideas presented are limited and under-developed. For instance, the writer mentions starting a small business or doing a partnership when facing unemployment, but this point lacks sufficient extension and explanation. The reasoning shifts abruptly into discussions about students and older people without clearly tying back to the central theme of whether to accept or fight back against adverse circumstances. To move to a higher level, the writer needs to fully develop each viewpoint with well-supported arguments and maintain a clear, consistent stance throughout the essay.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some basic organization in the essay, attempting an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, there is a lack of clear overall progression, and the logical flow is frequently disrupted by abrupt shifts in ideas. Cohesive devices are used minimally and often inaccurately, such as the repetitive use of phrases like "my first opinion about mt agreement is that" and mechanical transitions like "on one hand other argue" and "one one hand". Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks clear thematic unity. To improve in this area, the writer should use a wider variety of appropriate cohesive ties and ensure that each paragraph builds logically upon the previous one to guide the reader smoothly through the argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is limited and repetitive, reflecting a basic range that is only minimally adequate for the task. Words such as "job", "situation", and "people" are overused without much variation. There are numerous noticeable errors in word choice, word form, and spelling, such as "benefical", "succeded", "buiness", "established their on", and "conculsion". These lexical inaccuracies occasionally cause difficulty for the reader in fully grasping the intended meaning. To achieve a higher score, the writer must expand their vocabulary range, incorporate less common lexical items with greater precision regarding collocation and style, and pay closer attention to accurate spelling and word formation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response relies on a very limited range of sentence structures, and attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty. There are frequent errors in basic grammar, punctuation, and mechanics, including capitalization issues such as "i", subject-verb agreement errors like "some individual think", missing articles, and incorrect prepositions. Run-on sentences and fragmented thoughts are also present, such as in the phrase "it is not better for themfor instance some educated person applying for job their application was not accept". These frequent errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader. To progress, the writer needs to demonstrate a greater variety of grammatical structures while improving basic sentence construction, verb forms, and punctuation control.

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