Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Life is a series of ups and downs, and how we responds or challenging circumstances can describes our journey. Some individuals believe that it is best to accept some unsatisfactory situation such as, a bad job ore any financial hardship but some argue that it is good to try and improv such difficult situations.

Firstly, when we discuss about the people who believes that accepting bad situation is the best option can be proves as a best decision for somtime. For instances, leaving a unsatisfactory jobs without any backup plan ore without finding any new good job is very harmful for a people and it make more difficulties for individuals. Sometime such people that can leave their unsatisfactory job due to financial problem can face too many difficulties after this decision, this is because it cannot plan about a next situation before leaving a jobs.

When se see on otherside, some individuals believes that it is the best decision to try hardwork and improves such difficult situation. For example, some individuals that are unsatisfied with their job can firstly find a best job for him and after finding that it can leave the previous job that is very good plan for improving our difficult situation. We know a numbers of individuals that can improves their life style by their smart planning. If we want to improve unsatisfactory situations then firstly make a high profile planning that can work efficiently and help us for improvement.

To conclude, trying better for improving our unsatisfactory situation is the best option according to my opinion.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both views on how to handle difficult situations, such as unsatisfactory jobs or financial shortages, and provides a clear personal opinion in the conclusion. However, the development of ideas remains limited and under-developed throughout the essay. While the writer attempts to explain why some people advocate for accepting bad situations, the supporting points rely heavily on vague generalisations, such as stating that leaving a job without a backup plan is 'very harmful for a people' without fully elaborating on the consequences. Similarly, the arguments for improving situations lack extended support and precise details. To move up, the writer needs to present fully developed ideas with relevant, well-extended explanations and specific supporting examples that thoroughly address all parts of the task prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The essay displays some overall organisation, with a visible introduction, body paragraphs addressing each viewpoint, and a conclusion. However, there is a lack of clear overall progression, and the logical flow between sentences is occasionally disjointed. Cohesive devices are used repetitively and sometimes inaccurately, such as transitioning with 'When se see on otherside' instead of more natural academic linking phrases. Referencing is also problematic at times, with pronouns like 'it' and 'that' frequently being unclear in their reference to people or situations. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal structure of the paragraphs requires better logical sequencing. To achieve a higher band, the writer must ensure a smoother logical progression of ideas from sentence to sentence and employ a wider, more accurate range of cohesive devices without over-relying on basic connectors.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary, such as 'financial hardship' and 'lifestyle', but these attempts are accompanied by noticeable errors in word choice, word form, and spelling. For instance, words like 'improv' instead of 'improve', 'ore' instead of 'or', and 'hardwork' as a single verb or noun phrase rather than 'work hard' demonstrate mechanical lexical errors. Collocations are occasionally awkward, such as 'make a high profile planning'. While communication is generally maintained despite these flaws, the vocabulary remains basic and repetitive. To progress, the writer needs to expand their lexical range, demonstrate better control over word forms and collocations, and minimize spelling mistakes.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response demonstrates a very limited range of structures, relying mostly on simple sentences alongside attempts at complex forms that are frequently faulty. There are persistent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'how we responds', 'people who believes'), incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'can proves', 'can leaves'), missing articles, and awkward prepositional patterns. These frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader and obscure the intended meaning in places. To reach a higher band, the writer must use a wider variety of complex structures with greater accuracy, ensuring that the majority of sentences are free from basic grammatical errors and that punctuation and tense consistency are well maintained.

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