Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In the modern era, most individuals claim that it is best to accept a bad situation, like an unsatisfactory carrer or shortage of money. However, others believe that it is better to chnage and enhance their situations. I will expalin in following paragraphs along with suitable examples and my opioin too.

One of the primary reason is that why people should accept a bad situation form their an unsatisfactory jobs and career because they can easily get higer postion in their career. To elaborate it, if individuals work in one company around three or four years and they face any challanges in their job, so they can inistate to tell an issue and esclate them and find the soluation and work on it. Moreover, people have many numerous opotions to get high postion in their career.

On the other hand, bad situations will effect their health because some people believe that individuals should try to improve their difficult situations rather than simply accept them. One of the main reasons is that taking action can help people achieve better opportunities in the future. For example, if a person is dissatisfied with their job, they can develop new skills and apply for a better position. Similarly, people who face financial problems can find additional sources of income or improve their qualifications to get a higher-paying job. Therefore, making an effort to change an unsatisfactory situation can help individuals build a better future.

To conclude, althoug they can easily get higer postion in their career, bad situations will effect their health. I believe that health is very crucial for people so they should change their job if they face any difficult situations.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt only partially, fulfilling the requirement to discuss both views and present an opinion, but the ideas remain limited and under-developed. For example, the introduction relies heavily on a copied template style ('I will expalin in following paragraphs along with suitable examples and my opioin too'), and nine words copied directly from the task prompt were excluded from the word count. In the body paragraphs, the reasoning behind why people accept bad situations is disjointed and unclear, particularly in sentences like 'One of the primary reason is that why people should accept a bad situation form their an unsatisfactory jobs'. While the second body paragraph offers more relevant thoughts on improving difficult situations, the overall position is not always clearly sustained throughout the essay, resulting in a partial treatment of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is some basic organisation with visible paragraphing, but the essay lacks a clear overall progression. Cohesive devices are sometimes inaccurate, repetitive, or mechanically applied, such as the frequent reliance on 'To elaborate it' and 'Moreover'. Referencing and logical transitions within paragraphs are occasionally confusing, as seen in the sudden shift in the third paragraph regarding health issues. The introduction and conclusion also show mechanical referencing patterns ('In the modern era', 'To conclude'), which disrupts the smooth flow of ideas across the response.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary range is limited and minimally adequate for the task. There are noticeable errors in word choice, word form, and spelling that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader, such as 'carrer' instead of career, 'chnage' instead of change, 'expalin' instead of explain, 'opioin' instead of opinion, and 'higer' instead of higher. The student attempts some less common vocabulary, such as 'esclate' and 'soluation', but these attempts contain spelling and form inaccuracies that highlight the restricted control over lexical items at this level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The student uses a limited range of structures, relying mostly on simple sentences alongside attempts at complex forms that are frequently faulty. There are persistent errors in verb forms, tenses, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions, which cause strain and difficulty for the reader. Examples include 'One of the primary reason is that why people should accept', 'bad situations will effect their health' (confusion with affect), and 'althoug they can easily get higer postion'. Punctuation and article usage also show frequent inaccuracies throughout the text.

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