Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays, many people believe that accept any situation is best way such as finacial problems and unsatisfactory jobs. However, others think that we should try to improve such situations. This esay will discuss both views and later give own opinion in upcoming paragraph.

On the one hand, accet bad siituations can lead health issues. To elaborate, to full fill all needs money is very important and people believe that if we are facing financial problems we should accept it but it can be a health problem among the individuals because due to shortage of money, many people feel stressed and pressured from their families to earn money and it can affect not only their physical health but also mental health. Moreover, people often unsatisfied to their jobs but they are not trying to find new employment because they do not want to take risks but it can affect the relationships.

on the other hand, to improve such situation we should try our best such as we shoud find new employment. To explain, if people take risks to find new jobs they can improve their living status and it can beneficial for their relationship also because most of relationships affected due to shortage of money and people also will satisfied to find new jobs because satisfaction is very essential for their health. In addition, individuals can improve their skills such as communcation skills. To elaborate, to improve such situation people can improve their communication skills because they can find a better employment, so that they can find satisfaction in their jobs. As a result they will meet new collegues and will communicate with each other which can be beneficial for them.

Thus it can be concluded that accept bad situations is not a solution of finacial problems. To tackle this problem we should take risks by which we can get a better lifestyle.

In my opinion we should try to improve the situation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and state your opinion that people should try to improve difficult circumstances. The discussion of accepting a situation includes relevant effects such as stress and harm to physical and mental health, while the other view is supported with ideas about finding better employment and improving skills. However, the position is not consistently clear: the conclusion first says acceptance is not a solution, then gives your opinion separately, and the introduction promises an opinion later without stating it. Some points are asserted rather than explained—for example, the link between job dissatisfaction and relationships is not developed. Make your position explicit from the introduction and explain each main reason with a clear example or consequence.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Phrases such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “Thus” help signal the direction of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes repetitive or unclear: the second body paragraph repeats the idea of finding better employment and satisfaction, while several sentences are joined by “and” or “because” without showing how the ideas relate. The conclusion also separates the stated opinion from the preceding summary, weakening the ending. Use clearer topic sentences, group related points, and vary linking methods so that each paragraph develops one main idea in a logical sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “financial problems,” “shortage of money,” “employment,” “communication skills,” and “satisfaction.” These terms make the general meaning understandable. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling errors are noticeable, sometimes making the reader pause. Examples include “finacial,” “communcation,” and “collegues,” as well as unnatural phrases such as “improve their living status” and “full fill all needs money.” Repetition of “situation,” “people,” and “find” also limits precision. Build a bank of accurate topic phrases and check spelling and collocations; for example, use “improve their standard of living” and “meet their financial needs.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including clauses with “because,” “if,” and “which,” so there is some variety. However, errors are frequent, and complex sentences are often difficult to control. For example, “many people believe that accept any situation is best way” lacks a correctly formed clause and article, while “people often unsatisfied to their jobs” is missing a verb and uses an incorrect sentence pattern. There are also problems with agreement and verb forms, as in “it can beneficial” and “people also will satisfied.” These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas unclear. Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, then build longer sentences with subordinate clauses and check articles, verb forms, and agreement.

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