Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Many individuals believe that it is better to accept various kind of unpleasant situations such as unsatisfactory work, financial issues and other inconvenient life events as it keeps a person from setting unachievable goals. However, I believe that one should not stay irresistanet to these bad situations but rather work to bring a change as It helps them to achieve great things in life.

It could be argued that many life situations cannot be effected by the mere hard work of a person. For instance, an employ cannot change the attitude of his/her boss and have to continue working. Thus believing that anything can be altered is a rather foolish belief which can lead to unrealistic desires.

Although it might be true for certain situations, i largely believe that a person should keep thriving to change the undesired events of life. For example, if ancient human beings had never bothered to improve their ways of living, mankind would never have aquired this level of development.

It is the resistane towards unpleasant situations that improves an individual's quality of life. If a poor person accepts his poverty in the name of fate, he will never be able to become rich. Similarly, If an obese patient starts to believe that his life is unchangeable, than he might never be able to get fit.

In conclusion, I would say that although such belief can cause unrealistic expectations but it can effect a person in many positive ways such as improving their condition and state of life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address both views and make your own position clear: you acknowledge that some circumstances, such as an employee’s relationship with a boss, may not be changed through effort, but argue that people should try to improve their lives. The examples of human development, poverty and fitness are relevant and help explain your view. This meets the task well overall, though the two sides are not developed equally: the acceptance argument is brief, and the examples supporting change are asserted more than explained. The conclusion also repeats your position without fully weighing when acceptance may be sensible. To strengthen the response, explain the limits of personal control and distinguish these from situations where practical action can make a difference.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two perspectives, and a conclusion. The progression from the limits of effort to the benefits of trying to change circumstances is easy to follow, and connectors such as “For instance,” “Although,” and “Similarly” help signal relationships between ideas. However, some links feel mechanical, and the reference in “Although it might be true for certain situations” is not fully specific about what is true. The final paragraph also introduces examples without a strong transition from the preceding point. For a more controlled progression, make each paragraph’s central claim explicit and use clearer references to connect examples back to that claim.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of vocabulary, including “unachievable goals,” “unrealistic desires,” “quality of life,” and “development,” which allows you to discuss the topic beyond very basic terms. However, several noticeable spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision, including “irresistanet,” “aquired,” and “resistane.” Some expressions are also unnatural or imprecise: “an employ” and “keep thriving to change” do not convey your intended meaning naturally. Repetition of “situations” and “change” further limits flexibility. Aim to check spelling carefully and learn common collocations as complete phrases; this will make your ideas sound more precise and fluent without requiring unnecessarily complex vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex structures, including a conditional sentence (“if ancient human beings had never bothered…”) and clauses introduced by “although” and “if.” These choices show some range, and the main ideas remain understandable. However, some grammatical errors persist in sentence construction and punctuation. For example, “a person should keep thriving to change” has an awkward verb pattern, while “than he might never be able” uses the wrong comparative form in this conditional context. Capitalisation is inconsistent in “i” and “If,” and the opening sentence contains a long sequence of ideas that would benefit from clearer punctuation. Review conditional patterns, verb complements and sentence boundaries, then proofread for consistent capitalisation.

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