Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

That a very good question well in my opnion First one all the people's who accept the bad situation, they are always face many issues they are facing money problem their houses rent electricity bills children school fee and otther they can not manage it n the proper way and always facing many prolems. these are always dispointed to theirs lifes. their chlidren's are always doing very strugling lifes and they see other childrens who enjoys toys . these people is also called a bad comuntiy in socaity . In my prosspective These people was are doing two or three jobs but always they are doing very struggly life

On the other side the people's who do unsatisfactory jons or shortage of money the doing strugle and gain a good good job and these people earn more money and these people had doing

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You refer to both accepting hardship and trying to improve one’s circumstances, and you give some relevant examples, including rent, electricity bills, school fees, and seeking a better job. However, the discussion is very incomplete: the first view receives more attention, while the second is only briefly introduced and the response ends mid-sentence. Your own opinion is not clearly stated or explained, despite the opening phrase “in my opinion.” The response is also 107 words below the required minimum, which leaves too little space to develop both views. To improve, explain why some people accept difficult circumstances, develop the benefits and challenges of trying to change them, and state a clear position supported by reasons or examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response around the two views: “On the other side” signals a shift from people who accept hardship to those who try to improve their situation. The examples about household expenses also give the first section a general focus. However, the first paragraph contains many ideas joined together without clear sentence boundaries, so the reader has difficulty following their relationships. The second section is extremely short and unfinished, and there is no concluding paragraph to bring the discussion together. Use separate paragraphs for each view and your opinion, connect each example to a main point, and add a conclusion. A small number of clear linking phrases will be more effective than long, loosely connected sequences.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “shortage of money,” “unsatisfactory jobs,” “electricity bills,” and “children’s school fee.” These choices show that you can identify practical examples of financial hardship. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “these people,” “struggle,” and “always.” Frequent spelling and word-choice problems, such as “dispointed,” “socaity,” and “struggly life,” make some meanings difficult to understand. Some expressions are also unnatural, for example “bad community” for people experiencing hardship. Build a small set of accurate topic vocabulary and check spelling and collocations; this will help you express ideas more precisely without relying on repetition.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response attempts to express reasons and consequences, for example by linking financial pressures to difficulties in managing daily life. However, most sentences rely on simple patterns, and errors in sentence construction frequently make the relationships between ideas unclear. Examples include “they are always face many issues,” “these people is also called,” and “these people had doing.” There are also problems with articles, plural forms, and verb agreement, as well as missing or misplaced punctuation that creates run-on sentences. Practise forming complete subject–verb sentences first, then combine related ideas with accurate conjunctions. For instance, separate the list of expenses from the explanation of how they affect families, and check that each verb agrees with its subject.

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