Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Around a globe, some argue that it is better to accept a unfair situation and leave on luck, However, other argue that always try to struggle for positive situation. I agree with both views.

On the one hand, many individual agree with unfair situation of their life. For instance if some one loss job or live in poverity they accept it and blam on luck that it will already decide that i live in trouble and stop struggling to move for betterement. They lose there potential and never think for sucess.

On the other hand, some argued that always try for good situation, never compromise with toughest situation, like if one person lose their every thing if he think it is my luck and stand forever, no he make aim thst i will acheive again that was i lost try to work hard and expect for positive.

i agree, that it is better to struggle and never compromise in trouble try to move on because it's a better step for sucess. If you stand in challenging situation you never become a sucessfull man, and always live in such with bad condition, so always competitive with difficulties and try to reach where you feel comfort and luxury.

In conclusion, compromise make us week, so never make a thought that it will automatically turn in to Apex for us. Always work smart try to on that page where you feel plesent, and simply manage you matters and become a role model for other.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and state a position, especially in “I agree with both views” and later “it is better to struggle.” However, these statements create some uncertainty about your actual opinion: clarify whether you ultimately favour accepting hardship or trying to change it. The discussion is relevant, but the examples—losing a job, living in poverty, or recovering what was lost—are asserted rather than explained, so the reasons behind each view remain under-developed. Your conclusion repeats the idea that people should keep working, but does not resolve the tension in your opening position. Develop each side with a clear reason and a specific explanation, then maintain one consistent opinion throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall arrangement: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, your opinion, and a conclusion. Signposts such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the broad structure. However, progression within paragraphs is less clear because several ideas are compressed into long, loosely connected sentences, and the relationship between accepting a situation and blaming luck is not always explained. The opening says you agree with both views, while the later opinion favours struggle, which weakens the overall line of argument. Use clearer sentence boundaries and connect each example directly to the point it supports; also make the position consistent from introduction to conclusion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “potential,” “challenging situation,” “competitive,” and “role model.” However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices or collocations make parts difficult to understand, such as “leave on luck,” “move for betterement,” and “turn in to Apex.” Spelling and word-form errors, including “poverity,” “sucess,” and “week” for “weak,” also reduce precision. Aim to use familiar vocabulary accurately before reaching for more ambitious expressions. For example, describe someone as “relying on luck” or “trying to improve their circumstances,” and use “overcome difficulties” rather than “competitive with difficulties.” Proofreading for spelling and choosing natural word combinations would make your meaning clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use some simple sentences and attempt longer structures with clauses, for example, “if some one loss job or live in poverity they accept it.” However, these complex attempts are often faulty, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries frequently make the reader work to understand the meaning. Examples include “some argue” followed by “other argue,” “if one person lose,” and the run-on construction beginning “For instance if…”. Punctuation and capitalisation are also inconsistent, as in “luck, However.” Build accuracy by checking subject–verb agreement and tense, and divide long ideas into complete sentences. Once these patterns are more controlled, practise combining clauses with “because,” “although,” and “if.”

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