Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-10
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Some people believes that, its better to try and improve such situations.But some others argue that, it is better to accept a bad situation,like unsatisfactory job, shortage of money and like other kind of things.I believe that accept a bad situation because its a better to live.In this essay, we explore both views and discuss over view.
On the one hand, some believes that its better to try and improve such situations.Because we feel do not better when we accept bad things.When we saw a bad thing with us its better to try and improve this situation.Bad situations is not be acceptable for every person.We feel too much difficulties in improving but its crucial for us.For instance,i saw some people in my life who believes in this to try and improve such bad situations. They feel so good after imporving.
On the other hand, some believes that accepting a bad situation is a good thing because when they have unsatisfactory job they want to improve this but they did not go for this because of fear to loss their job, thats why they feel its a good thing.Such as,i saw in my family there is a person who have not a good job but he is satisfied that he have a job its does not matter its a good or not.
From my prespective,i believe its best to accept a bad situation for living in poor country.due to fact,its a poor country.There are too much poverty in this country, people are unemployed,government did not give jobs to every person.
To conclude,we discuss both views, both are good view in different sides. Firstly,other have different concequencies and other have another concequencies.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
You address both views and state a personal position, particularly in the opening and the paragraph beginning “From my perspective.” The examples of a relative keeping an unsatisfactory job and people trying to improve their circumstances are relevant. However, the discussion is only partial: the reasons for accepting a bad situation are not clearly distinguished from fear of change, and the claim that acceptance is best in a poor country is asserted rather than explained. Your position also shifts: the introduction says acceptance is better “because its a better to live,” while the conclusion says both views are good. Develop a consistent opinion and explain the consequences and reasoning behind each view more fully.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, your opinion, and a conclusion. Phrases such as “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” help signal the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear, and links can be repetitive or inaccurate. For example, “Because we feel do not better when we accept bad things” does not connect smoothly to the preceding sentence, while “Firstly” in the conclusion does not introduce a clear sequence. Some references, such as “this” and “other,” are vague. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each reason to its example and explanation.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
You use a small set of relevant words and phrases, including “unsatisfactory job,” “shortage of money,” “fear,” and “poverty,” so the main topic is generally understandable. However, vocabulary is limited and repeated, especially “bad situation,” “good,” and “believe.” Several word choices or collocations are awkward, such as “better to live,” “feel too much difficulties,” and “different concequencies,” which can make the intended meaning difficult to follow. Spelling errors such as “imporving,” “prespective,” and “concequencies” also reduce accuracy. Build a wider range of precise expressions for discussing acceptance, improvement, risks, and outcomes, and check spelling and natural word combinations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with clauses, for example, “because when they have unsatisfactory job they want to improve this but they did not go for this because of fear.” This shows an effort to express reasons, but complex sentences are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some ideas hard to follow. Examples include subject–verb agreement in “Some people believes,” missing or incorrect articles in “accepting a bad situation is a good thing” and “they have unsatisfactory job,” and verb-form problems in “people are unemployed, government did not give jobs.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also inconsistent. Practise accurate agreement, articles, and clause construction, then proofread each sentence for a clear subject and verb.
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