Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In these recent years there has been growing concern about whether yes or no should our life situation increase or shouild we stay stagnant and content with a compromised statue. i firmly believed that in life it better to try and improve our standard, the following discussion explores better my opinion.

In this life it is true we face alots of challenges, we passe through situation that are not really acceptable and the fact that it is bad doesnt means it is good for instance i can my school education to find a job and fullfilled my family needs, however it should not be the end of my carrer since by working there i will not be well remunerated. whereas if after 10 years of struggle i can go back to school and finish my education, my life starndard may increase consedarably well and that of my family too.

Personally, i think that those who content of bad situations, they have a very low esteem of themselves.

It is always good to fight for more you can be a good leader

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a clear preference for improving difficult circumstances: “I firmly believed that in life it better to try and improve our standard.” The example of returning to school to improve employment prospects is relevant and begins to explain your view. However, the response only minimally addresses the task because it does not explain the opposing view—that people may accept a bad situation—or develop a balanced discussion of both positions. Your own argument is also brief, and the final point about becoming “a good leader” is not explained. The response is 69 words below the required minimum, which leaves too little space to develop the discussion. Explain both views, support each with a specific reason or example, and conclude by restating your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening introduces the issue, a body paragraph gives an example, and “Personally” signals your opinion. The education-and-employment example also follows a recognisable sequence from current circumstances to a possible improvement. However, the ideas are not arranged into a coherent discussion of both sides, and the final sentence, “It is always good to fight for more you can be a good leader,” is not clearly connected to the preceding point. Linking words such as “however” and “whereas” are attempted, but their relationships are sometimes unclear. Use separate paragraphs for the two views and your conclusion, and make each paragraph develop one main idea in a clear order.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “challenges,” “remunerated,” “struggle,” and “standard,” and the example shows an attempt to discuss education, work, and family needs. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings make the meaning difficult to follow, such as “compromised statue” and “life starndard.” Some phrases are also unnatural, including “content of bad situations” and “fight for more.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. For example, you could describe an “unsatisfactory situation,” say someone is “content with a difficult situation,” and refer to improving one’s “standard of living.” These changes would make your ideas clearer and more precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentence forms, particularly when explaining how further education could improve your circumstances, and you use contrast with “however” and “whereas.” However, the range remains limited, and errors are frequent enough to make parts of the response difficult to understand. For example, “whether yes or no should our life situation increase” has an unclear question structure, while “it better to try” is missing a verb. In “the fact that it is bad doesnt means it is good,” the verb form is incorrect, and several sentences run together without clear punctuation. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with clauses using “because,” “although,” and “if.” Check subject–verb agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries.

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