Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Many individuals argue that acceptance of counter productive circumstance is fine for instant financial crises and less proficient job meanwhile other belive finding out improvement and progress is the better option.Compromising over such situations can lead to anxiety and depression but trying to get better in life and working hard can lead to improvement in living standard I admit that working hard and finding out best possible solution is always the best option.

It depends on everyone's prepective some sliently accept detrimental situation might be they hope for the right time or some mirical to happen which will change their life but I strongly disgree to such thoughts because it will be foolish to force ourselves over uncertainities moreover it could be wastage of time and efforts. For example you graduated and gave all of your efforts and time but at the end of the day you keeping forcsing youself to work for such companies which don't valuve you qualities and skills .

At the same time some of the people don't really belive on such arguments they keep improving in life and they try to get somewhere better ultimately they get better and improve in life for example i have seen many young people who stood against those curropt politicians and they protest for thier rights and surprisingly major change were seen that's the reason why I agree to this view because efforts and time never get wasted when you have dicplined mindset .

Although accepting bad situation could benefit the other but it can harm personal self meanwhile standing againts wrong can be best way to progess in life and benefit others so everyone should try thier best to get better and better in life .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and state a clear preference for trying to improve difficult circumstances, especially in the opening and conclusion. The discussion of acceptance is relevant: you suggest that people may wait for circumstances to change, while arguing this can waste time and effort. Your examples of workers seeking a more appreciative employer and young people protesting for their rights help illustrate the position. However, the two views are not developed equally: the reasons someone might accept a bad situation are only briefly considered, and the protest example is not closely connected to jobs or financial hardship. Explain more fully when acceptance might be sensible, such as when change is temporarily impossible, and develop the examples to show how they answer the question directly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two perspectives, and a concluding opinion. This gives the reader a basic route through the discussion, and phrases such as “At the same time” signal a shift between views. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because several ideas are joined into long sentences, and links such as “meanwhile” and “moreover” do not always show the precise relationship between them. The conclusion also introduces a contrast between personal harm and benefit to others without clearly connecting it to the earlier discussion. Use clearer topic sentences, divide complex points into shorter units, and make each paragraph develop one main idea in a logical sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “financial crises,” “detrimental situation,” “uncertainties,” and “disciplined mindset.” These choices show an effort to express abstract ideas rather than relying only on basic words. However, the range is limited by repeated general terms such as “better,” “life,” and “situation,” while several inaccurate word choices or collocations make meaning less clear—for example, “acceptance of counter productive circumstance” and “finding out improvement.” Spelling errors such as “belive,” “prepective,” and “curropt” are also noticeable. Build a bank of accurate phrases for employment and financial hardship, and check spelling and collocations carefully so that ambitious vocabulary communicates your meaning precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including a conditional idea in “if you graduated and gave all of your efforts” and a contrast introduced by “Although.” This shows some range, but control is inconsistent: several long sentences contain faulty clause structure or missing punctuation, making relationships between ideas hard to follow. For instance, “some sliently accept detrimental situation might be they hope” combines clauses without a clear grammatical link, and “you keeping forcsing” has an incorrect verb form. There are also errors with articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries. Practise building complex sentences with clear subjects and verbs, and use full stops to separate complete ideas; then proofread for tense and agreement.

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