Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some people argue that being in worse situation like unpleasent job or rain out of money is suitable to accept while others say its best to try and improve these situations which true in itself because everyone trys theirs best to improve their overall position but some circumstances requires them to accept these tough situations as well.

On one hand, some people believe it is best to accept a bad situation if they face like unsatisfactory job or shortage of money because these requires the patience and scarifice in some cirsumsatnces like for example an person working in a toxic environment with unpleasent job for their family to fullfill their needs might require patience and acception because they cannot lose their job for betterment of their family. Another point is the shortage of money as well because it develops the sense of responsibility like for example spending money according to their needs rather than spending it on useless thing. If they have less money then they would spend it more wisely and pricisely.

On the other hand, Others argue that it is best to try to improve thes situations which is good too because everyone wants to earn more and fullfills their as well as their family needs and wants. So by trying hard it enables them to work hard as they can according to their potential and limit which then can results them being in more comfortable situation.

My opinion is that a person should try to improve their situation rather than accepting defeat or scarifing themselfs because when you try hard you can achieve what you wants or desires. Also by trying people can have a satisfied feeling in themselfs that atleast they tired instead of feeling guilty or regret

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and give a clear opinion: you explain why someone might stay in an unsatisfactory job, discuss careful spending when money is limited, and argue that people should try to improve their circumstances. These points are relevant, and the family example gives the first view some support. However, the two sides are not developed equally. The discussion of accepting a difficult situation is more specific, while the case for trying to improve it is mostly general, such as wanting to earn more and work to one’s potential. The opinion is clear but could be supported with a fuller explanation of how improvement might be achieved and when acceptance may be sensible. The eight words copied from the task prompt were not counted.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: an introduction, separate paragraphs beginning “On one hand” and “On the other hand,” and a concluding opinion. This makes the discussion easy to follow. You also use examples to connect claims to situations, such as the worker supporting a family. However, some links are mechanical, and the opening sentence combines the two views and your position in a long, difficult-to-follow structure. Within paragraphs, ideas sometimes run together; for example, the point about accepting a job and the explanation about patience could be separated and linked more clearly. The final paragraph also ends abruptly. Use clearer sentence boundaries and more precise references so each point builds naturally on the previous one.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “unsatisfactory job,” “toxic environment,” “shortage of money,” and “sense of responsibility.” There are also attempts at more specific expressions, such as “comfortable situation.” However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable and sometimes make the reader pause: “unpleasent,” “scarifice,” “acception,” and “pricisely” are examples. Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, including “rain out of money,” “fullfills their needs,” and “accepting defeat.” These issues limit the accuracy and flexibility of the vocabulary. Check spelling carefully and learn common collocations for work, finances, and improving circumstances; this will make your ideas clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses with “because” and “if,” and the reader can generally understand your main points. However, some errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles, and verb forms remain. For example, “these requires” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “an person” uses the wrong article. In “it enables them to work hard … which then can results them,” the clause structure and verb form are not controlled. The opening sentence also contains several ideas joined into one sentence, making its grammar difficult to follow. Practise building accurate sentences with one main idea, then add subordinate clauses; check agreement and verb forms when revising.

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