Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Bad situation it learn how to do pass this time. A number of people believe that it is to accept a circumstances, situation, such as low encome and unsatisfactory job. Other individuals argue that it is better to try and improve that situations. In my opinion, individuals facing such poor situations should actively fight against these challenges to achieve their goals."

When individuals accept that a situation cannot be changed immediately, htey stop wasting energy on painc or anger. insten, they focus on adapting, which builds peace and teaches them how to mange will resourcse.For example, sometime people fase global warming at that time their wages cut but, they pass this situation and does not give up job. so that time people learn to circumstances. Furthermore, people face shortage money so that time people show bad situation. at time people make paision and not take any decisions it will harm to in future.

On the other hand, in bad situation people try to how to best circumstances than before beacuse it provide to motivate or inspire to. For example, Many students failures in eam but they doest not giveup instead they try to improve our marks. Moreover, if people make pasion in baad time, so it easily spend and relax mind also cruical at that time.

In my opinion, people allways make pasions and wait for better time. while, bad situation is also face many problem such as shorytage money and job.

In counclusion, people face such poor time but they learn to fight same time, also pasion is many essential for people because refresh mind may be take decision better.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both views and state an opinion: you explain that accepting circumstances can reduce anger and help people adapt, while your second body paragraph argues that people should try to improve their situation. The student example about trying to improve exam marks is relevant. However, the discussion is only partial because several points are unclear or insufficiently explained, and your final position shifts: you first support actively fighting challenges, then say people should “make pasions and wait for better time.” Explain whether acceptance is temporary coping or the best response, and develop each view with a clear reason and example. The response meets the required length; the nine words copied from the task prompt were excluded from the count.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Signposts such as “On the other hand,” “Furthermore,” and “In my opinion” help show the intended direction. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow: the global-warming example, wage cuts, and keeping a job are connected unclearly, while the point about making decisions appears without a clear link to the preceding idea. Some linking phrases are also used mechanically or inaccurately, including “so that time” and “while” at the start of the opinion sentence. Build each paragraph around one main point, explain it, and then connect a relevant example to it using clear references.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “unsatisfactory job,” “shortage of money,” “adapting,” and “achieve their goals.” These choices show an effort to discuss both coping and improvement. However, the range is limited and many spelling, word-form, and collocation errors make meaning difficult to understand, for example “encome,” “mange will resourcse,” “make pasion,” and “spend and relax mind.” Some phrases appear to be direct translations rather than natural English, such as “learn to circumstances.” Aim for accurate, natural combinations and check spelling carefully. Reusing a smaller set of correctly formed expressions will communicate your ideas more effectively than attempting unclear phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a conditional structure in “When individuals accept that a situation cannot be changed immediately…” and a contrast introduced by “On the other hand.” However, sentence patterns are often incomplete or faulty, and errors frequently make relationships between ideas hard to follow. For example, “Many students failures in eam but they doest not giveup” lacks correct subject–verb forms, while “people face shortage money” has missing grammatical elements. The opening fragment, “Bad situation it learn how to do pass this time,” is also difficult to interpret. Practise complete subject–verb sentences, consistent verb forms, articles, and punctuation; then check each sentence for a clear subject and main verb.

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