Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Life is full of uncertainity and people have to face the difficult situations several times, some people believe to accept and move on and some beleive to struggle and try to change the situation, i strongly believe on struggle and improvements as only acceptance is not the solution.

The bad patch and scenrios are part of routine of everyone, "for instance" unsatisfactory jobs are usually create issues for employes, they have to face the job pressures and sometimes even not able to manage the work life balance which resulted into job stress and anxiety, some people react in these particular situations to compromise on health or ignore the families and several people try to cope up with diffrent outdoor activities after working hours or swith thier jobs or organisations matched with their interests, the option to manage is far better than accept the situation and leave yourself to the flow.

on the other hand, most commonly people have to face several kinds of financial issues due to the fluctuations in inflation rates, in these types of situations people must try to manage their expenses and also try to find out some other sources of money, their are diffrent examples available where people usually runing the small scale online businesses alonwith jobs, which are required a slight effort and time but the benefits are huge, through these types of contineous efforts people can easily improve the financial conditions or issues.

in conclusion, the ongoing trails to improve, new skills of enhancements, and struggle can change the whole scenrio, in ups and downs of life everyone should make efforts and change the pictures.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and state a clear preference for trying to improve difficult circumstances: “I strongly believe on struggle and improvements.” The examples of changing jobs, protecting work-life balance, managing expenses, and starting an online business are relevant and help explain your position. This meets the task, but the two sides are not explored equally: acceptance is mentioned mainly as compromising health or ignoring family, rather than explaining why someone might reasonably accept a situation, such as limited alternatives or a need for stability. Some supporting points, especially the claim that online businesses bring “huge” benefits, are asserted rather than explained. Develop the reasons behind each view and support examples more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. The shift to the second view with “on the other hand” is clear, and the conclusion returns to your central argument. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because several ideas are joined into very long sentences, particularly the discussion of job stress and possible responses. Linking phrases such as “for instance” and “on the other hand” help, but some connections are mechanical or unclear, and the first body paragraph moves between consequences and solutions without a clear sequence. Use shorter sentences, organise each paragraph around one main point, and make references between ideas more explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “job pressures,” “work life balance,” “financial issues,” “inflation rates,” and “online businesses.” These choices show an effort to discuss employment and money, but the range is limited by repeated general terms such as “situations,” “issues,” and “try,” while several inaccurate word choices or collocations make meaning less natural. Examples include “acceptance is not the solution,” “cope up with,” and “change the pictures.” Spelling errors such as “uncertainity,” “scenrios,” and “contineous” are also noticeable. Build a more precise set of topic-specific expressions and check spelling and collocations; this will make your ideas easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “which” and “where,” and your main position is generally understandable. However, complex sentences are often not controlled successfully, and errors in sentence boundaries, verb forms, agreement, articles and prepositions recur. For example, “unsatisfactory jobs are usually create issues” has an incorrect verb pattern, while “their are diffrent examples” has an agreement error. The opening sentence joins several independent ideas with commas, making the structure hard to follow. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a clearly attached supporting clause, and check subject–verb agreement and verb patterns before adding complexity.

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