Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

IT IS ARGUED THAT READY TO ADOPT ANY BAD SITUATION LIKE UNSETISFACTION ABOUT JOBS,LESS FINICIAL RESOURCES AND CREDIT IS BEST RATHER THAN DENY IT WHILE OTHERS BLIEVE DO WORK HARD TRY LUCK AGAIN AND AGAIN TO CONVERT CRISES INTOREWARDS IS MUCH BETTER .I PERSONALLY THINK THAT ACCEPT EVERY HARSH EXPERIENCE WITHOUIT HASITATION AND TRY HARD TO OVERCOME BAD SITUATION IS BETTER THAN REGRET .IN THIS ESSAY I WILL DISCUSS BOTH POINTS TO SUPPORT THIS VIEW .

ON THE ONE HAND EVERYONE FACE MULTIPLE SITUATIONS GOOD OR BAD THROUGHOUT LIFE ITS DEPENDS MANY IMPORTANT FACTORS LIKE DESTINY ,EFFPORTS,AVAILABLE FINICIAL RESOURCES ,EDUCATION SPECIFICATIONS AND FAMILY SUPPORT .IN ADDITION EARNING AND EXPENDITURE OF EVERY DAY LIFE NEEDS ALSO PLAY CRUCIAL ROLE TO ACCEPT ANY BAD SITUATION .FOR INSISTANCE SOME TIME PEOPLE DO WORK HARD BUT NEVER GOT SUCCESS AND WALKING THROUGH BAD FINICIAL CONDITIONS BUT NIETHER REGRET JUST BECOME MORE DETERMINED AND MORE SERIOUS TOWORDS THEIR GOALS IN ADDITION LEARN A LESSON FROM EVERY BAD EXPERINCE.

ON THE OTHER HAND SOME PEOPLE JUST CONSIDER DESTINY RESPONSIBLE FOR THEIR CRISES MEANWHILE THEY NEVER LOOK INTO POCKETS BEFORE SPENDING MONEY AND THEIR SAVINGS AT THE END WHEN FACE ANY FINICIAL ISSUE JUST GO PANIC AND MAKE THEM UNBEARABLE TO ANY BAD SITUATIONS IN CONTRAST TO WORK HARD OR TO FIND ANY APPROPIATE SOLUTION TO OVERCOME MONEY CRISES .

FINALLY IT IS CONCLUDE THAT UNSATISFACTION ABOUT JOB ,LOSS IN BUSINESSES,LESS SAVINGS ,HIGH CLASS LIFE EXPENDITURES ,SPEND MONEY WITHOUT PROPER CALCUATIONS ,INABILITY TO WORK HARD ,HIGH IMMUTURITY TOWORDS GOLS ACHIEVMENT CAUSE PEOPLE MORE PANIC OR LESS CONVIENENT TO ACCEPT ANY HAZARDIOUS SITUATION .IN MY OPENION IT MUST BE ESSENTIAL TO MAKE PROPER CALCULATIONS ,LOOK AFTER CAREFULLY DRAWBACKS OF EVERY DECISION RELATED TO FINICIAL RESOURCES .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You present a position—that accepting hardship while trying to overcome it is preferable—and include a paragraph for each view. The discussion is only partly developed, however. The first body paragraph mentions effort, finances, education and family support, but does not clearly explain why accepting a bad situation can be the best response. The second focuses mainly on poor spending and panic, rather than developing the opposing argument that people should actively improve an unsatisfactory job or financial situation. Your conclusion recommends careful financial decisions, but this narrows your opinion and does not fully resolve the broader question. To strengthen the response, explain both views directly, support each with a specific example, and state consistently whether acceptance, action, or a balance of both is your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two contrasting body paragraphs signalled by “On the one hand” and “On the other hand,” and a conclusion. This helps readers identify the intended discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow because several points are crowded into long sentences, and the links between them are unclear. For example, the first body paragraph moves from destiny and personal resources to daily expenses, then to learning from failure without showing how these ideas support acceptance. Connectors such as “in addition” and “in contrast” are sometimes repetitive or do not express the relationship accurately. Use shorter, clearly focused paragraphs and make each sentence build on one central idea with precise referencing and transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “financial resources,” “determined,” “goals,” and “appropriate solution,” and you try to express abstract ideas about hardship and responsibility. However, spelling errors and inaccurate word choices are frequent enough to make parts of the message difficult to understand, as in “unsetisfaction,” “finicial,” “hazardious,” and “convenient.” Several phrases are also unnatural or unclear, such as “convert crises into rewards,” “look into pockets,” and “high immaturity towards goals achievement.” This limits precision and makes the vocabulary seem repetitive despite the range of ideas attempted. Build accuracy with common topic collocations first, and check spelling and word forms carefully before using less familiar expressions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “while,” “but,” and “when,” and the essay’s overall meaning can sometimes be inferred. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries make the reader work to interpret the ideas. For example, “everyone face” needs subject–verb agreement, while “some time people do work hard but never got success” has problems with tense and sentence construction. Several passages, especially the opening and conclusion, run together without clear punctuation. Practise writing one complete idea per sentence, checking subject–verb agreement and consistent tense, then add subordinate clauses only when their grammatical relationship is clear.

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