Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

A few individuals think that it is good to adopt a wrong situation, like an unsatisfying employment or lack of income while, others argue that it is best that to try and enhance such situation. A better and satisfying job gives peace of mind and better living stander. In this essay, i will discuss both view of points and give my perspective.

On the one hand, an unsatisfactory job have no burden from compeny or boss and persond do not want take risk of losing that job and he has not nay stress of failure but in this ituation he can not live an ideal life. For instance, employee in a small pricate compeny can not grow a lot and he also can not fulfil desires of family. Lack of investment some times stuck people and they can not grow up. For instance, a of business manger understand hole work but some of then can not open own due to shortage funds.

On the other hand, man is very selfish he always wants more and more in life but, some times it becomes need of a person as he has some dutes on him. Moreover individuals work with full attention in satisfying place where he has polit colleagues. For instamce, an employee gives his best in under sporting head and in friendiy environment. Some people have set big goals for family and himself and also do not satisfy from their job. For instance, a man who wnats to become a very rich person but through job he can not become through job and he always try to improve it.

To sum up, from my perspective we should always try to improve us at every stage of life. I strongly believe that we must leave from unsatisfactory job because it is our comfertzone and a person can achive every thing from his industiousness.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and state a clear opinion in the introduction and conclusion: you argue that people should try to improve their circumstances. The examples about limited career growth and insufficient business funds are relevant, and the discussion of job security gives some support to accepting a difficult situation. However, the first view is not fully explained, and several points are unclear or only briefly developed—for example, the claim that an unsatisfactory job has “no burden” from a boss does not clearly explain why someone should accept it. The second view also shifts between ambition, family duties and workplace conditions without showing how each supports improvement. Develop each side with a clearer reason and explanation, and make your position consistent throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs beginning “On the one hand” and “On the other hand,” and a concluding opinion. These signposts help readers follow the broad direction of the discussion. Within paragraphs, however, progression is sometimes difficult to track because several ideas are placed next to one another without clear links. For example, the first body paragraph moves from job security to family desires and then to business investment. The repeated “For instance” also makes the linking somewhat mechanical, while references such as “this situation” and “it” are not always precise. Group related points together and use clearer cause-and-effect links so each example directly supports the paragraph’s main idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to work and personal circumstances, including “shortage of money,” “risk of losing that job,” “goals,” and “improve.” There are also efforts to use less common expressions, such as “peace of mind” and “full attention.” However, the range is limited and many word-choice, collocation and spelling errors make parts of the response difficult to understand. Examples include “adopt a wrong situation,” “living stander,” “sporting head,” and “comfertzone”; these do not express the intended meanings naturally. Repetition of “job,” “person” and “improve” also limits flexibility. Learn accurate phrases for accepting or changing circumstances, and check spelling and collocations before using less familiar vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple sentences and attempts at longer structures, including clauses introduced by “while,” “but” and “because,” so there is some variety. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors in agreement, articles, verb forms and sentence construction recur. For example, “an unsatisfactory job have” should use a singular verb, while “it is best that to try” has an incorrect construction. In “he always try to improve it,” the verb does not agree with its subject. Some sentences also run together or use punctuation in ways that obscure the relationship between ideas. Practise building accurate subject–verb patterns and joining clauses with clear punctuation; then check each sentence for agreement and complete grammatical structure.

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