Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

There are two types of people and their believes whom both of had their different point of analytical and financial views about situations some thought that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job and financial issues.others opinion that it is better to try and improve such situations.

On the one side,this was the best way to accept the reality that works hard only way to saves our lives from poverty. Now a days,people were so lazy and break down their sense of responsibilites and do not work hard for their future in this case,they left our hands empty while other achieve everything they would need in their life once. On the other side,it is better to improve the qualities rather than doing that unfair activities that would ruin their lives firstly,they awake their inner most calling abilities to work hard and try,try again till they succeeded because it is the hardwork which help them to ged rid of this situation sometimes.it is the very benefical for moving look forward

From my perspective, there is a lot of ways that helps to improve bad situations but the one most common was the betterment of circumstances and it is only comes from hard work.we would be teached from childhood that everything come from the movement if we not move today we will be the same in future and if we want our betterment than we have to build our concerns and respnsibilites if we understand this situation we will be work hard and will broaden our skills

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address both views: the first body section presents accepting reality and working hard, while the next argues for improving one’s circumstances. Your own preference is also stated in “From my perspective,” where you support improvement through hard work. However, the discussion is only minimally developed: the reasons are broad, and there are no clear examples explaining when acceptance might be sensible or how people can improve a poor situation. The opening is difficult to follow, and the conclusion does not clearly summarise both sides. The response is 237 words, below the 250-word minimum; the 24 words copied from the task prompt are not counted. Develop each view with a specific explanation or example and complete the response to the required length.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, two sections signalled by “On the one side” and “On the other side,” and a personal view. These markers help readers identify the intended contrast. However, progression within paragraphs is weak because several ideas are joined into long, unclear strings, and the opening sentence is especially difficult to interpret. Connections such as “in this case” and “sometimes” do not clearly show how one point follows from another. Paragraphing and punctuation are also inconsistent, with large gaps and missing spaces after full stops. Use one main idea per paragraph, organise each body paragraph around a clear reason and explanation, and use linking phrases only where the relationship between ideas is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “unsatisfactory job,” “poverty,” “responsibilities,” and “broaden our skills,” so the main topic is generally identifiable. However, the range is basic and several word choices or combinations are inaccurate enough to strain understanding. For example, “their different point of analytical and financial views” is unclear, “left our hands empty” does not express the intended idea naturally, and “moving look forward” is difficult to interpret. Spelling and word-form errors such as “responsibilites,” “benefical,” and “respnsibilites” also reduce clarity. Build a more reliable set of phrases for discussing employment, financial hardship, and personal improvement, and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “that,” “because,” and “if.” This shows an effort to connect reasons and consequences. However, control is very limited: frequent errors in sentence structure, verb forms, agreement, and punctuation sometimes make the intended meaning hard to follow. Examples include “their believes whom both of had,” “the hardwork which help them,” and “we will be teached.” Several sentences run together without clear boundaries, as in the opening and the final paragraph. Practise building accurate short sentences first, then combine them using one clear subordinate clause. Check subject–verb agreement, tense, articles, and sentence boundaries during revision.

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