Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Both views are different as people which are suffering from hardships sometimes except them as the part of their life and start spending their life as it.They start blaming the world to be cruel instead of managing and planing.They think that this is their luck and it's can't be changed.They always remains sad and boring.They start accepting every bad situation and believing something miracles happen to them.They start surviving on what they have and didn't plan to improve They are coward and don't takes risk so they remains always behind.They play very safe so they cannot comes first and desired to only complete the work.

The other views are much better because theyvare thinking to improve so they are not stuck in an confined comfort zone. They try to become successful and they works for that and that's the only things that matter. If you don't olan you can't be successful.So those people which ate trying to improve themselves are always better than those which are not trying. They have a hope in life and this hope matters much.They enjoy their life and always have an motivation for their future.They always do something and engaged un different activities which kept him busy.They are always cheerful and

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address both views: the first paragraph describes accepting hardship, while the second supports trying to improve one’s circumstances. Your preference is apparent in “The other views are much better,” so the reader can identify your opinion. However, the discussion is only partial: most points are broad claims, such as people who accept hardship being “coward” or those who try being “always cheerful,” with little explanation or a concrete example. The response also ends mid-sentence (“They are always cheerful and”), leaving the argument unfinished. The required minimum of 250 words is not met; the response contains 206 words. Develop each view with reasons or examples, explain your position more fully, and complete the conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic division between the two views, and the shift to the second position is signalled by “The other views.” This gives the response some organisation. However, ideas within each paragraph are mostly listed one after another rather than developed in a clear progression. Repeated openings such as “They start” and “They always” make the writing feel repetitive, while links between claims are often missing. The final sentence is incomplete, so the response has no clear ending. Use separate, purposeful paragraphs for the two views and your opinion, group related reasons together, and add linking phrases that show cause, contrast, or consequence. A brief conclusion would help the reader follow the overall argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “hardships,” “comfort zone,” “successful,” and “motivation.” However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “They start” and “They always.” Some choices are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “spending their life as it,” “believing something miracles happen,” and “complete the work,” which make parts of the message difficult to interpret. There are also spelling errors, including “planing,” “olan,” and “ate.” Aim to use more precise expressions for coping with difficulties and pursuing change, and check spelling and collocations carefully. Replacing repeated general words with specific descriptions would make the discussion clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some longer sentences, for example, “They start blaming the world to be cruel instead of managing and planing,” but most structures are simple, and errors are frequent enough to make several sentences difficult to understand. Examples include “it's can't be changed,” “They always remains,” “they works,” and “they cannot comes,” where verb forms or subject–verb agreement are incorrect. Other sentences have unclear construction, such as “Both views are different as people which are suffering from hardships sometimes except them.” Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several sentences run together and missing full stops. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and verb forms first, then build longer sentences using clear clauses and check each sentence for punctuation.

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