Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The above statement stated as there are many persons which have perspective not to challenge their life and agree with the current circumstances like having financial problem and somethings like that. On the other handmsome believe that they can change their life by struggling more to get rid of this situation and can live a better life.

From my point of view,I totally agreed with the second idea because I believe that consistency, mindset,hardwork and ambitious goal, It can your life acccording to your imagination. The world is fulfilled with a lot of examples which makes their life regarding to their dream life. Like if we take an example of famous footballer Cristiano Ronaldo. He is a great example for those who want to make an increadiable change in their life. He is from a poor family and living in poverty but his hardwork,ambitious mindset and consistency took him to his superiority and gave him the title of best footballer in the world which makes him ultimate rich and a global influencing personality. So,i agreed that a person can changed his life. There is a qoute that motivate me most,it stated as; "if you want something you never had,you have to do something you never did."

To some extent,I believe that sometimes it is better for us to accept a bad situation because if we take any risk in that moment its conclusion will ridiculous and more harmful that cause us a severe damage. So,it is good to survive in a poor condition. For instance,If you are a trader and you have lost your capital so it is better for you to stay away from market it gives you some time and after time your mentality stable and you will trade better but if you do overtrading it will harsh for you.

In the conclusion, "Do your best and be prepare for your worst" it is a motivational quotes which helps us in both terms when you are about growing more and enhancing yourself work with your full efficiency and when you are going to bare a bad situation handle it with peace and calm.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You discuss both positions and make your own view clear: you support trying to improve one’s circumstances, while acknowledging that accepting a difficult situation can sometimes be sensible. The Ronaldo example gives relevant support to your main argument, and the trader example illustrates caution about taking risks. However, the first view—accepting an unsatisfactory job or financial hardship—is addressed less fully than the case for striving to improve. The trader example focuses on pausing after a loss rather than explaining more broadly when accepting a bad situation is beneficial. Develop both sides more evenly, and explain the conditions behind your examples so the reasoning is clearer and more persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph supporting change, a paragraph considering acceptance, and a conclusion. The examples generally appear in the paragraphs where readers expect them, and phrases such as “On the other hand” and “For instance” help signal relationships. However, some links are mechanical or unclear, and several sentences contain multiple ideas joined without clear punctuation, making the progression harder to follow. The conclusion’s quotation also shifts attention away from directly summarising the two views. Use clearer topic sentences, divide long sentences, and connect each example explicitly to the point it supports; this would make the organisation more consistently easy to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “financial problem,” “poverty,” “consistency,” and “overtrading,” and you attempt more expressive phrases such as “ambitious mindset.” However, the range is limited by repeated general words such as “life,” “situation,” and “better,” while several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear: “took him to his superiority,” “global influencing personality,” and “its conclusion will ridiculous.” Spelling errors such as “increadiable,” “accroding,” and “qoute” also reduce precision. Build a more reliable set of phrases for discussing hardship, risk, and improvement, and check spelling and collocations so your intended meaning is consistently clear.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including conditional structures such as “if we take an example” and “if you do overtrading.” The main ideas are usually understandable, but errors in sentence formation and verb forms recur. For example, “I totally agreed” should use the present form “agree,” and “a person can changed his life” needs the base verb “change.” The sentence beginning “From my point of view” also becomes incomplete after “ambitious goal,” while several sentences run together without appropriate punctuation. Practise building complete sentences with one clear main clause, then add subordinate clauses carefully. More accurate verb forms and sentence boundaries would improve control while retaining your attempts at complexity.

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