Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In humans lives anything can happen either it is good or bad but it is necessity to accept the situation and move on.Few people believe that is the right way to accept a bad condition like unfulfilment employment for financial support and others states that it is better to try and improve the such bad periods.

This essay will explore both the views and states my opinion.

To begin with, in every worst situation of the life the main theme of the mankind isto face the challenges and ability to come across this courage will give hope and confidence to move forward for example,due to poor financial status if person is doing lower standards job is doesn't mean that is he or she is in bad condition just to cope with condition in the livelyhood.

On the other hand,it is better to try for new opportunities in the carrrr simultaneously working with some work Although, unsatisfactory job will gives less income it will definitely create some betterment in the life morever,depending on the big things it is better to keep going with flow with out any interruption in the growth.

However,life is all about ups and down sometimes it is better to accept the things and need to get out of things.

In my opinion i strongly believe that it is better go work with some unsatisfied job and this gives courage and strength in diffuclties in life .This will automatically shows the right way in life without any hard situations.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify both positions—accepting a difficult situation and trying to improve it—and state a preference for continuing in an unsatisfactory job. However, the discussion is only partial: the first view is difficult to distinguish from your own opinion, and neither side is explained with a clear, relevant example. The point that a lower-paid job can provide courage and strength does not fully explain why someone should accept a bad situation, while the argument for seeking new opportunities is unfinished. Your conclusion also shifts between accepting circumstances and continuing in an unsatisfactory job, so your position is not consistently clear. The response is 243 words, seven words below the 250-word minimum; the eight words copied from the prompt are excluded. Develop each view and state your position consistently.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response with an introduction, separate discussion paragraphs, and a conclusion. Signposts such as “To begin with,” “On the other hand,” and “In my opinion” help readers recognise the intended stages. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear: the first body paragraph moves from facing challenges to a lower-standard job without explaining the connection, and the second contains an incomplete, confusing sentence about new opportunities. The paragraph beginning “However” repeats the idea of acceptance rather than clearly advancing the argument. Some linking words are used mechanically or do not show the intended relationship. Give each paragraph one clear main point, explain it in sequence, and use transitions only where they accurately connect ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “financial status,” “new opportunities,” “unsatisfactory job,” and “confidence.” These choices show some range beyond very basic language. However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or unclear, which sometimes makes the argument difficult to follow. For example, “unfulfilment employment,” “lower standards job,” and “keep going with flow” do not express the intended ideas naturally. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “carrrr,” “morever,” and “diffuclties.” Aim for precise, familiar collocations rather than complicated phrases, and check spelling carefully. For instance, “unsatisfactory employment,” “low-paid job,” and “go with the flow” would be clearer in the relevant contexts.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a sentence beginning “Although” and a concluding sentence with “This will.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and frequent errors can make meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “Few people believe that is the right way,” “if person is doing,” and “unsatisfactory job will gives,” which show problems with clause structure, articles, and verb forms. Agreement and sentence boundaries also need attention: “others states” and the run-on construction after “for example” make the ideas harder to read. Practise building accurate sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check articles, agreement, and punctuation before adding extra clauses. More reliable control of basic structures is the priority.

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