Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Many people are facing diffrent situation and problems in current period. few of them are surviving, many people don't want to give up on this kind of problem they crave to explore the cause rather than taking serious thier situation, on the other hand if look up to others. these people are the one who like to accept the situation and just start thier job where they are not comfortable or neither they like the job.

but beacuse of the circumstance which created by the socity and family for example financial,medical,education and multiple situation effect this kinds of situtation where the human don't have any desire to work but they dont have any option perhapse the hinder is in big number but they has to survive it all.

on the other side whatever the situation are how much the capitalism were raised many of people has cohesian nature they don't want to give up on their dreams and the life they imagined for their self, essintialy they are passionate about their carrer choices. if this people want to beacome singer or an artist they choose thier self rather than working on some corprate place where they are mentally unavialbe.

to conclude this in my opinion whatever the thing were or situation were created human should be loyal and devoted towards thier pasion or their carrer beacuse is it worth it to be working at that kind of place where you feel blank and unavilable, and what to live if you don't feel that you are living.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both perspectives: the second paragraph explains that financial, medical, and family circumstances can leave people with little choice, while the third describes people pursuing careers they care about. Your conclusion also gives a clear preference for following one’s passion. However, the discussion is only partly developed. The first paragraph’s contrast is difficult to follow, and the examples of becoming a singer or artist are not explained in enough detail to show how people can improve an unsatisfactory situation. Your position also appears mainly in the conclusion rather than being established clearly throughout. Explain each view more directly and support it with a specific reason or example, then state your opinion consistently.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure, and phrases such as “on the other hand,” “on the other side,” and “to conclude” signal changes in direction. However, the overall progression is not always clear: the opening paragraph shifts between people who try to address problems and people who accept their circumstances without defining the contrast precisely. Some linking phrases are repetitive or do not connect the ideas accurately, and references such as “these people” and “this people” can leave the reader unsure who is meant. Build each body paragraph around one view, introduce its main point clearly, and use pronouns only when their reference is unmistakable. This would make the organisation easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “circumstance,” “capitalism,” “passionate,” and “career choices,” and you communicate the broad ideas of financial pressure and personal ambition. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts of the response difficult to understand, such as “cohesian nature,” “mentally unavialbe,” and “the hinder is in big number.” Some expressions are also unnatural or imprecise, including “explore the cause” and “what to live if you don't feel that you are living.” Choose simpler, accurate phrases when unsure, and check spelling carefully. Learning collocations for work, financial hardship, and pursuing ambitions would help express your ideas more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example with “because of the circumstance” and “if this people want to become singer or an artist.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in sentence boundaries, agreement, articles, and verb forms can make the meaning hard to follow. The opening contains several incomplete or poorly connected clauses, while “this people” and “they has to survive” show problems with agreement. Punctuation and capitalisation are also inconsistent, particularly at the start of sentences. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then combine related ideas using accurate conjunctions. Check each sentence for a clear subject and verb, and review articles and plural forms.

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