Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-22
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
A large number of individuals argue that it is the best to accept a bad circumstance, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Other believe that, it is better to try and develop such as situation. In my view, people should try and develop their situation, achieving future goal and build a succesful career.
On the one hand, there are many reasons individuals want to stay connecting unsatisfactory job or shortage of money because job crisis . In Bangladesh, most of the people come from low-incom families and individuals can not find proper job, what's they want. As a result, if someone resign their job they may can not find better job later. In addition, it depends on people situation, when a person faces difficulties the may seem to that it is the best to accept a situation, thanks to if they leave this job he may unable to earn money.
On the other hand, some people argue that they should try to develope their circumstance for achieving future goal. When a person still connected their unsatisfactory job, it can help them to gain lots of experience and stay patient in difficulties situation. For instance, a person join a jobs that he do not like his job. But if he doesn't leave this job also stay connect he may more beneficial in future jobs. However, he gains experience and patience. Thus, in future he can a build succesfull career.
In conclusion, while people believe that a bad situation best to receive unsatisfactory job and money, providing to learn experience, I contend individuals should try to improve situation for achieving a better job and build a bright career in future.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
You address both views and state a clear preference in the introduction: “people should try and develop their situation.” The body paragraphs also give relevant reasons, including financial insecurity as a reason to remain in a poor job and the possibility of gaining experience by staying. However, the discussion is only partially developed. The first view is supported mainly by the risk of not finding another job, while the second paragraph’s example is difficult to follow and does not clearly show how staying in an unsatisfactory job improves the situation. Your conclusion repeats your position but describes the opposing view unclearly. Explain each side more fully and make the example directly support your opinion.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a conclusion. “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” help signal these stages. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow, particularly in the example beginning “For instance, a person join a jobs.” The links between ideas are also occasionally unclear: “Thus” introduces a conclusion about a future career without showing precisely how the preceding points lead to it. Some transitions are repetitive, and references such as “this job” and “this situation” do not always make the intended meaning clear. Organise each paragraph around one main reason, then explain it and connect it explicitly to the task.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “unsatisfactory job,” “low-income families,” “experience,” and “career.” However, the range is limited, and several inaccurate word choices or collocations make parts of the response hard to understand. For example, “stay connecting” and “develop their circumstance” do not express the intended ideas naturally; “receive unsatisfactory job” is also unclear in the conclusion. Spelling errors such as “succesful,” “develope,” and “families” (written as “familys” in the response) further reduce accuracy. Build a more reliable set of phrases for discussing employment and financial security, and check spelling and word forms carefully.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, using structures such as “because” and “if,” but control is inconsistent and errors often make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “Other believe,” “if someone resign their job,” and “he may can not find,” which show problems with agreement and verb forms. In “when a person faces difficulties the may seem to that,” the sentence structure and pronoun use are unclear. Articles and sentence construction also need attention, as in “a person join a jobs.” Practise forming accurate conditional sentences and checking subject–verb agreement, verb patterns, and articles. Clearer, shorter sentences would help communicate your ideas while you develop more complex structures.
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