Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Some people says that bed situation is acceptable such as unsatisfactory job and shortage of money. some people says that we can start own small biusiness rather then other works. This type of people can not do work of another. These people had a different mind set. people says do work with another is not saticfie because thie cause of shortage of money and restless. on the other side some people says that in this situation we need to improve himself. These peoples canwork with patient. they always try to keep best for their future. In bed situation we should try to improve their work. we shoulad not loss hope. In my opinion we should try to improve in bed situation. we should understand work and can do it if is not good but we improve himself with the time. we should always to standup for bed situation. We can change bed situation into good situation with thier efforts. when we can do better work in bed situation then unsatisfactory job can change in to satisfactory job. to standup bravely in bed situation can change whole life of man. In colcolution the person should to focus on their aim. They can not see that the situation is bad or good they should only focus on their goal.This is the best way to get success in life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You give a clear opinion that people should try to improve difficult circumstances, especially in “we should try to improve in bed situation” and the conclusion’s focus on goals. You also refer to both accepting a bad situation and attempting to improve it. However, the discussion is minimal: the first view is not explained clearly, and the suggestion of starting a small business is not developed or linked convincingly to accepting an unsatisfactory situation. Most claims, such as effort changing a person’s life, lack reasons or examples. The response is also 24 words below the required minimum, which limits the space available to address both views. Develop each side with a reason and a specific example, then explain why your preferred approach is better.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic overall direction: you introduce contrasting views, state your opinion, and finish with a conclusion. Phrases such as “on the other side” and “In my opinion” help signal these moves. However, the response is presented as one continuous paragraph, so the stages of the argument are not clearly separated. Ideas also repeat—for example, that people should improve a bad situation and not lose hope—without building a clear sequence of reasons. Some links between points are difficult to follow, particularly the shift from starting a business to being unable to work for others. Use separate paragraphs for the two views, your opinion, and the conclusion, and connect each claim to an explanation or example.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a small set of relevant words and phrases, including “unsatisfactory job,” “shortage of money,” “future,” and “goal.” These show awareness of the topic, but vocabulary is basic and often repeated, especially “bed situation,” “work,” and “people.” Several spelling and word-choice errors make the message harder to understand, such as “biusiness,” “saticfie,” and “restless” where the intended meaning is unclear. Some expressions are also unnatural, including “standup for bed situation” and “focus on their aim.” Build a more precise range for discussing hardship and responses to it, and check spelling and collocations. For instance, use “difficult circumstances” and “make an effort to improve one’s prospects.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both short statements and longer sentences, and the reader can generally identify your main opinion. However, sentence structures are very limited, and errors occur frequently in basic grammar. Examples include “Some people says,” where the subject and verb do not agree, and “we should improve himself,” where the pronoun does not match the subject. Articles and verb patterns are also problematic in “we should always to standup” and “if is not good.” Several sentences run together or lack clear punctuation, as in the final lines. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, pronoun consistency, and common verb patterns such as “should try to improve.” Then combine ideas using controlled clauses and punctuate each sentence clearly.

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