Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

some indivituals has differnet opinions one is when you doesnot have satisfatory job or enough money you should accept this fact and lives you life while, second opposes this and says to try and overcome this issue.

There could be different reasons to support both options these totally depends on the mentallty of indivisual person. Some reasons to support first option could be: 1st the person would have background of family who had suffered from these issues throughout there life, 2nd there is no one to guide them or to give them ways how to overcome this and 3rd they could have religious mindset which says everthing is from creator and he is testing you and you should always be thankfull to him.

Just like that there are also some reasons to support second option some of few could be: 1st there childhood growth would have been done in such environment that they dont have to give up and always try to improve, 2nd they would be listening or reading books of the successful people in world which teaches them failure is part of success you just have to try until you doesnot get successful and 3rd they want to match the standards set by social media and this can only be done if they improve there quality of life for that they have to overcome these sort of situations.

In my opinion I am with the people who support second option because I think I have to do my best without thinking of results I should be doing thing which are in my hand. Secondly I don't want any sort of regrates in my life Just like I should have done that and others like that.

Overall everyone is right according to there own mindset.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response addresses both views and gives a clear personal preference for trying to improve difficult circumstances. The explanations about family background, lack of guidance and religious beliefs offer relevant reasons for accepting a situation, while the discussion of upbringing, success stories and social-media standards covers reasons to strive for change. However, several points are listed rather than explained: for example, the influence of social media is mentioned, but its effect on someone’s choices is not explored. The personal opinion is also brief and would be stronger with a specific example or fuller reasoning. To develop the response further, explain the consequences of each view and connect the supporting points more directly to the question’s examples of work and money.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The essay has an overall structure: it introduces the two positions, discusses each in turn, states an opinion and ends with a conclusion. This makes the main line of argument understandable. However, the numbered lists (“1st,” “2nd,” “3rd”) make the body paragraphs feel like collections of points rather than a developed discussion. Some linking is mechanical, as in “Just like that,” “Secondly” and “Overall,” and the final sentence, “everyone is right according to there own mindset,” does not clearly reinforce the writer’s preference. Use topic sentences and develop one or two reasons in connected sentences, with clearer references between ideas, to create smoother progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses a range of relevant vocabulary, including “overcome,” “religious mindset,” “successful people” and “quality of life,” so the reader can follow the general argument. However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable and sometimes make the wording difficult to interpret, such as “indivituals,” “satisfatory,” “mentallty” and “regrates.” Some phrases are also imprecise or unnatural, including “match the standards set by social media” and “childhood growth would have been done.” Aim for accurate spelling and more natural collocations, such as “meet expectations shaped by social media” and “grow up in an environment.” This would make the vocabulary more precise and reduce effort for the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

There are attempts to use both simple and more complex structures, including clauses introduced by “because,” “which” and “that.” The overall meaning is usually recoverable, but errors in agreement, verb forms and sentence construction occur across the response. For example, “some individuals has” should be “some individuals have,” and “when you doesnot have” should be “when you do not have.” The sentence beginning “There could be different reasons” also runs into a long list without clear sentence boundaries, while “I should be doing thing” has an incorrect plural form. Practise checking subject–verb agreement, verb forms and punctuation, and break long sentences into clearer units while retaining some complex structures.

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