Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some people believe that acceptance of the bad circumstances is the best strategy even related to job or any financial issue while others argue that we should make efforts to improve that type of worst situations. I believe that we should always try again and again to make our life better.

It is one of the essential point about we must have knowledge. Because unfortunately, somtimes incidents happen in our lifes we have shortage of money or sometimes. We are unable to get opportunities in our lives of our own desires, but we should not miss that option but it does not mean that we rely on it. We should try to find out new employments. There are many ways of it that we can read newspapers even in this modern era we should watch new post on different social media platforms like instagram, google, twitter and linkdin, etc. Nowadays all these play crucial role in our lives we can avail a lot of opportunies. We have to dropped our CV and give interviews to the different sectors. So, rather than sitting down, stand up and try try again, till you succeed.

However, some people think that what they gain after getting a good job or by earning more money. They believe that now they managed themselves in this service then why he made extra efforts. Also some people thought so that they do not need to do anything, opportunities come towards him. One more thing is that people become sad and depressed from his life, they think that they do not have such type of ability to reached to high rank.

Therefore, there are different opinions of differents persons, some show considerartion towards getting more reward but others do not give attention to this topic. But for achieving goals an bright future, it is necessary for all of us to make our life organized by visualizing the facilties. As we all know that inflation rate in increased in our country day by day so, we should not waste the time. We should try to get the things in time.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear overall preference for trying to improve difficult circumstances, and the examples about seeking employment and applying for jobs are relevant. However, the discussion of acceptance is only briefly presented: the points that people may feel satisfied with their current job or become discouraged are not explained in depth, and the essay does not fully compare the two views. Some ideas in the first body paragraph, such as the opening point about “knowledge,” are unclear or not connected to the argument. To strengthen the response, explain why accepting a situation can sometimes be reasonable, then develop your own view with a specific example and a clearer explanation of its benefits.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a concluding paragraph, so there is some recognisable organisation. Linking expressions such as “However” and “Therefore” help signal shifts in direction. Nevertheless, the overall progression is difficult to follow because several ideas are placed together without clear relationships. For example, the first body paragraph moves from knowledge to financial hardship, job searches, social media, and a motivational slogan. The conclusion repeats the general position rather than drawing together the main arguments. Use one main idea per paragraph, arrange supporting details in a logical order, and make references such as “that option” and “this topic” more specific.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “shortage of money,” “opportunities,” “CV,” “interviews,” and “inflation rate,” which helps communicate the subject. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “crucial role” and “achieving goals.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, sometimes making the intended meaning harder to understand. Examples include “the best strategy even related to job,” “new employments,” and “show consideration towards getting more reward.” Spelling errors such as “opportunies,” “linkdin,” and “facilties” are also noticeable. Build a bank of natural phrases for employment and financial circumstances, and check spelling and collocations during revision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “because,” “but,” and “as,” and the main message is generally recoverable. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors occur frequently in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction. For instance, “It is one of the essential point about we must have knowledge” has an unclear structure, while “we have to dropped our CV” uses an incorrect verb form. In “people become sad … from his life,” the pronoun does not agree with the plural subject. Several sentences also run together or contain incomplete thoughts. Practise building accurate sentences around one main clause, then add subordinate clauses and check subject–verb agreement and verb forms.

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