Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is often argued that many people thinks that accepting bad situation in life it has good impact such not satisfied from job or financially unstable. While the other thinks that it is better to improve the situation. In this essay we will discuss both perspectives and in the last I will give my opinion on this statement.

The people which are in favour of to live a life in the bad situation is also have reasons. In other words, if a person facing bad situations either on job side or economic this will make the person stronger to have a patience and value of object. For example, working on less salary in the starting will develop the personality of a person importance of a working rather then unempolyement. Consequently, it will lead to unsatisfiction in a job and shortage of money.

On the otherhand, some people are in the favour of self improving is more heavy than the accepting bad situaation. Furthermore, searching for better opportunities will help to keep person motivated instead of sitting on one place. For example, In the starting working in a small company and struggling to work life balance but in parallelly looking for other opportunities to improve life situation. So as a result, this will lead a person to better life.

From my perspective I am in the favour of improving a life with the passage of time rather than stressing or regreting in whole life. Following this view will keep you update according to ongoing era.

In conclusion, sometime people arguing for accepting bad situation in working place or shortage of money, in contrast remainning are on the improvement side, In my view keeping ourselves update according to the era is the best way for work life balance.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and state a clear preference for improving one’s circumstances, particularly in “I am in the favour of improving a life.” The examples about starting on a low salary and seeking opportunities are relevant, but their explanations are unclear or incomplete. For instance, the first example says hardship builds patience and appreciation, yet concludes that it leads to job dissatisfaction and money shortages, without explaining how this supports acceptance. Your own position is also only briefly justified by saying people should stay updated with the era. Develop each view with a clear reason and explain how each example proves it; make the conclusion reinforce the same, more fully explained opinion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, your opinion, and a conclusion. This makes the overall arrangement coherent. You also use signposts such as “On the other hand,” “For example,” and “In conclusion” to guide the reader. However, some links are mechanical or do not express the intended relationship clearly. “Consequently” introduces a result that does not follow from the preceding point, and the final sentence combines contrasting ideas with unclear punctuation. The opinion paragraph also feels detached from the discussion. Improve progression by linking each example directly to its claim and using references such as “this approach” only when their meaning is unmistakable.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-relevant language, including “financially unstable,” “better opportunities,” “motivated,” and “work-life balance,” and the reader can generally identify your main ideas. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or unnatural expressions make parts difficult to interpret. Examples include “self improving is more heavy,” “value of object,” and “keep you update.” Spelling and word-form errors such as “unsatisfiction,” “unempolyement,” and “regreting” also reduce precision. Build a more reliable set of phrases for discussing employment and financial circumstances, and check collocations and spelling. More accurate wording would help you express the contrast between accepting hardship and taking action without relying on vague phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including conditional phrasing such as “if a person facing bad situations…” and a contrast introduced by “While.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence construction occur frequently enough to make some ideas difficult to follow. For example, “many people thinks” has incorrect subject–verb agreement, while “The people which are in favour … is also have reasons” combines incompatible structures. “In this essay we will discuss…” is more controlled, but the overall range remains limited. Practise building accurate basic clauses first, then join them with one clear subordinate clause; check that each sentence has a complete verb and that subjects and verbs agree.

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