Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Nowdays many people belive that it is best to accept a bad situation such as unsatisfactory job or shortage of money . While other argue that benifit learn to nwe think ,development for skiis.

On the on hand accept to bad situation .It is a good think for health beacause we are maind is relaxed is anytime is most impotant in our life beacause fasltly reson be saticefaid life .Life saticefaid to anytime we are happy and sececond good think is less stress humar are good thard anlige for moind and this time we are accept all think and stres is loss.such as we are gooing to works 8 am and work is very had and come from 6 pm this time maind have types of stress but we are accept for anything .and we are maind is fress.

However other people say argue is better improve such situations .It is a good thinks because this time we have development for new skills any we are learn for new think ,Most of people independent such as not money problems,not unsatisfactory.

In my opinion i think both are impotant human life accept the baf situation we are machors but better improver sch situation are most impotant while not cost issue,and jpb sectors.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You attempt to discuss both views and give a personal position: you describe accepting a difficult situation as potentially reducing stress, then say that improving it can help people develop skills and become more independent. However, these points are brief and often unclear, so the discussion only partially addresses the task. Your opinion—“both are important”—is stated, but the final qualification about improving a situation “while not cost issue” is difficult to understand and is not explained. The response contains 200 words, so it is 50 words below the required minimum; 11 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Develop each view with a clear reason and a specific example, then explain which approach you favour and why.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a basic overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph beginning “On the one hand,” a contrasting paragraph beginning “However,” and a concluding opinion. These signals help the reader identify the two sides. However, progression within paragraphs is difficult to follow, especially in the first body paragraph, where several points about health, happiness, stress and work are repeated without a clear sequence. Connections such as “and this time” and “but” do not always show the intended relationship between ideas, and some references are unclear. Use one main idea per paragraph, arrange its explanation and example in order, and use linking phrases only when their relationship is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “unsatisfactory job,” “shortage of money,” “stress,” “development” and “independent.” These choices show an attempt to discuss the issue, but the range is limited and several repeated or inaccurate expressions make meaning hard to follow. For example, “a good think for health” and “development for new skills” do not express the intended ideas naturally; frequent spelling errors such as “Nowdays,” “belive” and “improver” also reduce clarity. Build a small set of accurate topic phrases and check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise expressions for wellbeing, financial difficulty and improving circumstances would help you explain your ideas effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Your response mainly uses short, simple statements, with a few attempts to connect clauses, such as “because we are…” and “such as we are going to works…”. This shows some effort to form longer sentences, but the structures are often faulty and meaning is frequently difficult to recover. Examples include “other argue,” “we are maind is relaxed,” and “we are accept for anything,” where agreement, sentence structure and verb forms are not controlled. Articles and punctuation are also inconsistent, and several sentences run together or lack a clear grammatical subject. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add one subordinate clause at a time, checking subject–verb agreement and verb forms.

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