Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The arguement between to accept a bad situation and to try for the improvement ofthe situation, remains a matter of controversy. Some individuals prefer to forget the bad situation by accepting the fact because otherwise, it will make usdemotivated and we will lose the stamina to come back into the normal life. While others believe that accepting is not the solution instead of trying to improve the situation.

When we face some inwanted consequences, it will make us dissapointed if we continiously thinks about the situation. If we do not accept the truth then we will keep regretting which will not bring anything good. So, it is preferable to accept the bad consequences such as financial crisis or dissatisfaction in job and move forward without having any expectation from the situation and also keep ourselves from regretting.

There is a believe that through hardwork and consistent trying, people can solve any kind of problems also can achieve the desire success. Accepting the fact will not bring any change if we do not try to improve the situation rather it will lead us in the path of depression where we will lose our motivation to try. For exmple, there areso many example in psychology where people has proved something impossible they have thought to do in reality just doinghardwork with the goal of improvement.

In conclusion, there is no denying that accepting is not the solution to bring positive output rather

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You introduce both positions and give relevant reasons: accepting a setback may prevent continued regret, while effort may help people improve their circumstances. However, the discussion is only partial and the opinion is not clearly established. The opening says what each group believes, but does not state which view you support; the conclusion begins “there is no denying that accepting is not the solution” and then stops, leaving your final position and reasoning incomplete. The examples are also general: the reference to psychology does not identify a specific case or explain how it supports the argument. The response is 10 words below the required minimum, which further limits the development. To strengthen the response, state your view clearly and develop each side with a specific, explained example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, one paragraph for each view, and an attempted conclusion. This helps the reader identify the main stages of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear, and links between ideas can feel mechanical. For example, “So” introduces a conclusion about acceptance, while “There is a believe” starts the opposing view without a clear transition. The opening sentence of the first body paragraph also begins “When” but is followed by a comma splice, making the relationship between the ideas harder to follow. The final sentence is unfinished, so the essay does not reach a complete ending. Use clearer topic sentences, connect each reason to its example, and complete the conclusion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “financial crisis,” “dissatisfaction,” “motivation,” and “improve the situation.” This gives you enough language to communicate the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or repetitive, which sometimes makes the meaning less clear. Examples include “forget the bad situation by accepting the fact,” “unwanted consequences,” and “desire success”; more natural phrasing would make your ideas easier to understand. There are also noticeable spelling errors, such as “arguement,” “dissapointed,” and “continiously.” Build a wider set of accurate phrases for discussing setbacks, coping, and taking action, and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including conditional structures such as “If we do not accept the truth then we will keep regretting.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors can make the reader work to understand your meaning. For instance, “When we face some … consequences, it will make us disappointed” shifts from plural “consequences” to singular “it,” while “people has proved” has incorrect subject–verb agreement. The opening also contains a sentence fragment beginning “While others believe,” and the final sentence is incomplete. Punctuation is sometimes inaccurate, particularly where clauses are joined with commas. Practise checking sentence boundaries, agreement, and verb forms, then read each sentence aloud to identify incomplete or awkward constructions.

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