Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

A number of indviduals belive that it is quite best to accept a bad situation like unsatified job or lack of money.On the other hand, some contradict this and they belive it is better to search try and update such kind of situation.

If we talk about the first opinion, sometimes it is not possible to find a good job ,people think that it is enough for us than nothing.If we talk about developing countries, number of indviduals are facing this problem due to the lack of better opputunities,or sometimes it may be the fear of their boss. The companies sometimes blackmail their employers and many of them having responsibilities on thier shoulders will bear this situation for the 2 time meal for their family and parents.These are some reasons that some people do hard jobs, face bad situations for the well being of their family.

On the other hand, some people encourage to get a new job, a better oppourtunity to tackle such kind of hurdles.This may be the point of view of every eduacted indvidual.

From my perspective i partially agree with the indviduals those who are in favor of to face the difficulty due to the fact that if they are running the circuit of their family, they might have to bear the blackmailing, burden and many other challanges.As fear of losing a job is the main reason that sometime they favor to be at an unsatisfied job position.

While I strongly believe that we should try for better oppourtunities to tackle such kind of situations.Because in developing countries, high spikes in the prices of everything, an average people survive hardly,maybe they have to eat for only 2 times a day. It is also Necessary for Governments to supports every poor family.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views: the paragraph about people keeping difficult jobs explains financial responsibilities and fear of losing work, while the later discussion supports seeking better opportunities. Your own position is present, but it shifts from “I partially agree” with accepting hardship to “I strongly believe” people should improve their situation, so the overall stance is not fully clear. The reasons are relevant, especially the pressure of supporting family, but the second view is less developed: it is mainly asserted rather than supported with a specific explanation of how people can improve their circumstances. Make your position consistent and develop each side with a clear reason and example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction to the two views and then to your opinion. Paragraphing helps the reader identify these sections, and phrases such as “On the other hand” signal contrast. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow: the first body paragraph moves from job scarcity to employers’ conduct and family meals without clearly connecting each point. Repeated openings such as “If we talk about” and repeated references to “such kind of” make the linking mechanical. The final paragraph also introduces government support without explaining how it connects to your main argument. Use clearer topic sentences and link each supporting detail explicitly to the paragraph’s central idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to employment and financial hardship, including “responsibilities,” “blackmailing,” “opportunities,” and “burden.” These choices show an effort to discuss the topic beyond very basic terms. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes meaning less clear: “search try and update” does not express the intended idea naturally, and “2 time meal” is unclear. Spelling errors are also noticeable, including “indviduals,” “belive,” and “oppourtunities.” Build a reliable set of topic-specific phrases and check spelling, word forms, and collocations. Prefer precise expressions such as “seek a better job” and “struggle to afford basic necessities.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a conditional structure in “if they are running the circuit of their family, they might have to bear…” and a reason clause beginning “due to the fact that.” However, complex sentences are often difficult to control, and frequent errors affect clarity. For example, “some people encourage to get a new job” lacks a clear grammatical subject for “encourage,” while “many of them having responsibilities… will bear” has an awkward clause structure. There are also recurring problems with articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries, as in “an average people survive hardly.” Practise building shorter, complete sentences first, then combine ideas with accurate subordinate clauses and punctuation.

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