Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays, lifestyle of people has improved a lot in compare to past because of better career opportunity and improvement in technology. However, some times in pupils life some bad situation occurs and some people believe that they should accept their situation and others believes that it is better to try and improve such situations. Further in this essay I'm going to explain some points and in the end I'll mention my prospective.

There are many humans which have some bad situation in their life and they accept it and that situation break them in to paces by accepting that situation. After then they don't even try to improve their situation. They feel unconfident, angary, frustrated, low level of energy and many more. Then slowly they start have worries about their future and become depressed person and in the end they lost faith in them and couldn't able to do any thing in their life.

However, there are many people who do not accept the bad situation and they try and try and improve their situation. They find different types of ways to improve their live. They even don't think about whether it is day or night they don't even see the time and work hard and hard to improve their condition and one day they change their situation. Such as - a singer named king. He came from lower middle class some time he don't have money to eat food but he followed his paten and work hard to achieve his goal. He didn't accept his situation and figured out the way to achieve his goal and now he is the finest rapper in India.

To conclude, I believe that accepting the situation is not the proper way to over come form the bad situation. People should try hard and take needed action to improve their situation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You discuss both positions and make your own view clear in the conclusion: you argue that people should take action rather than accept difficult circumstances. The example of the rapper King also gives some support to the view that persistence can improve a person’s situation. However, the discussion is uneven and the first view is not explored in a balanced way. You mainly describe negative emotional consequences of accepting a bad situation, without explaining why someone might reasonably accept it—for example, when change is outside their control or acceptance protects their wellbeing. The second view is also supported by a single example rather than broader explanation. Develop the reasons behind both perspectives and connect examples more directly to the question.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. This helps the reader follow the broad direction of the argument, and transitions such as “However” and “To conclude” signal changes in focus. Nevertheless, progression within paragraphs is sometimes repetitive or unclear. In the paragraph about accepting a situation, several consequences are listed in sequence, while links between them are not always explicit. The long description of King also repeats the idea of working hard without clearly separating the example’s details from its relevance. Some linking phrases, including “Further in this essay,” feel formulaic. Use clearer topic sentences and explain how each supporting point develops the paragraph’s main idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including terms such as “frustrated,” “depressed,” “achieve his goal,” and “improve their situation.” However, the range is limited and several noticeable word-choice, spelling, and collocation errors make parts of the response less natural or occasionally difficult to interpret. Examples include “break them in to paces,” “paten,” “finest rapper,” and “prospective.” Repeated use of “situation,” “improve,” and “hard” also limits precision. Aim to choose expressions that fit the intended meaning and vary repeated words—for instance, describe people as “overcome by setbacks” or “work persistently.” Proofreading spelling and checking common word partnerships would make your ideas clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including sentences joined with “because,” “and,” and “but.” This allows you to express causes, consequences, and contrast, but complex sentences are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some passages difficult to read. For example, “some people believe … and others believes” has an agreement error, while “they start have worries” and “couldn't able to do” show problems with verb patterns. Articles and sentence boundaries also need attention, as in “become depressed person” and the extended sentence beginning “They even don't think about whether it is day or night.” Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and verb forms, and divide long strings of ideas into complete sentences.

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