Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays,some people admire that it is best to accept a bad situation,such as un satisfactory job or minimum amount of money.While other argue that it is better to try and improvr such situation.In my opinion,every indivisual should try to improve their financial situation.

One important reason that why always should individuals try to improvre their financial situation.The first step to improve their situation is get the job according to their potential,If they have the unsatisfactory job individual can't grew in their life financially.For instance,If the person had much of skills but he don'y have job according to thier potential and have less amount of salary,these reasons approach him to get a better job.

Moreever,some people don'y try to get a better job due to the fact that,those individuals are lazy and having a lot of feelings with their job and also with their colleages and they believe that it is best to accept bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money, they don't care's that kind of difficulties andnot change their jobs.

Insumup,individuals always should try to get a better job and salary.

In conclusion,I argue that is not good to admire a bad situation or un satisfactory job,thats individuals should alwaystry to improve their situations.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a clear opinion that people should try to improve their financial situation, and you mention relevant examples such as finding work that matches a person’s skills. However, the discussion is only partial: the view that people may accept a bad situation is mentioned mainly as a claim that they are lazy or attached to colleagues, rather than explored fairly. Your ideas are also brief and not sufficiently explained or supported. The response contains 180 words, so it is 70 words below the 250-word minimum; the 30 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. To strengthen the response, develop both viewpoints with reasons and examples, then explain more fully why you favour one. The position is present, but the task needs fuller coverage and development.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an introduction states your view, the middle paragraphs give reasons, and the ending restates your opinion. Linking expressions such as “For instance,” “Moreover,” and “In conclusion” help signal relationships between ideas. However, progression is limited because the paragraphs do not clearly develop two balanced viewpoints, and the final two sentences repeat the same conclusion. Some connections are difficult to follow, particularly the long sentence beginning “some people don’t try to get a better job,” where several ideas are joined without clear relationships. Use one paragraph for each view, connect each reason to an explanation or example, and avoid repeating the conclusion. Clearer sentence boundaries and more precise referencing would make the organisation easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the general subject, including “financial situation,” “potential,” “salary,” and “unsatisfactory job.” There are also attempts to express ideas beyond very basic statements, such as describing work that matches a person’s potential. However, the range is limited and several spelling, word-form, and collocation errors make the writing less clear or natural: “admire” does not fit the intended meaning, “minimum amount of money” is awkward, and “grew in their life financially” is not idiomatic. Repetition of “better job” and “situation” also restricts variety. Build a small set of accurate phrases for discussing employment and financial hardship, and check spelling and collocations before submitting. More precise vocabulary would help express your ideas without changing their meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a conditional example beginning “If the person had much of skills.” This shows an effort to explain relationships between circumstances and outcomes. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries frequently make the meaning harder to follow. For example, “While other argue” lacks agreement and forms an incomplete contrast, while “individual can’t grew” combines an incorrect verb form with a singular subject. Several sentences also run together after commas, and the opening has no space after punctuation. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a clearly attached reason or example. Check subject–verb agreement, infinitives after “can,” and full stops before adding more complex structures.

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