Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Some people argue that it is best to accept a bad situations, for instance an unsatosfactory job or a lack of money. While others believe that it is better to try to make such situations better. I'd argue that trying to imrove bad situations would be the best options.

On the one hand, some people would rather to accept a bad situation at work or at a daily basis. One of the main reasons that some situations can't be imrpoved that easily so some people stick to it. Such as being in bad working conditions or being with difficult collegues can't be improved or replaced so accepting this situation would be the best option. Another important reason is when the situation is a shortage of money, sometimes a person could be working in a job offering not much but they accept this situation because they need the job and it's not that easy to find another so they stick to it even it's not the best to be in. For instance, i was working in a client service because i needed money, i was working in bad conditions with a bad salary but i accepted the situation because it wasn't easy to find another job and i couldn't risk it.

On the other hand, some other people would rather to try to improve such situations. This is mainly because they always wants to be better and they can risk it all to be in a better position, good working conditions, easy collegues and to be satisfied. As a result, they can be in 3 jobs in a month just to find the perfect one for them. For exemple, my dad was looking for a perfect job so he would try every opportunity just to feel satisfied and to feel it was worth it changing his job almost every two months. Another reason for people to be wanting to improve is to have the perfect paiement in a job. This means that some individuals could change a job because they didn't feel satisfied about the salary.

In conclusion, although accepting difficult circumstances may sometimes be necessary, I believe that people should make an effort to improve their situations rather than simply accept them, as taking action can lead to better job opportunities and a more stable financial future.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address both views and state your position clearly: you explain why people may accept difficult circumstances, then argue that trying to improve them is preferable. The examples about your client-service job and your father’s job search make the discussion relevant and help support the main points. The conclusion also restates your view and gives reasons for it. However, some ideas are developed more fully than others. The reasons for accepting a situation are explained in detail, while the point that people seek better pay is only briefly stated, and the claim that someone may have three jobs in a month would benefit from clearer explanation. Develop each main reason with a specific consequence or explanation to make the discussion more balanced and complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Signposts such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” make the progression easy to follow. Within paragraphs, you generally move from a reason to an example, particularly in the discussion of accepting a job because it is difficult to find another. Some linking is mechanical or unclear, however: “Such as being in bad working conditions” is a fragment, and “This is mainly because” does not connect smoothly to the preceding claim. The examples also sometimes interrupt the general discussion. Use complete sentences and clearer references, and link each example explicitly to the point it illustrates.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to discuss employment and financial circumstances, including “working conditions,” “shortage of money,” “salary,” and “job opportunities.” Some phrases also show an attempt to express more specific ideas, such as “a more stable financial future.” However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable, including “unsatosfactory,” “imrove,” “collegues,” and “paiement.” Some combinations are also unnatural, such as “easy colleagues,” “perfect paiement,” and “risk it all to be in a better position.” These choices can make parts of the argument less precise. Build a reliable set of collocations for work and finances, and check spelling and phrasing carefully before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, using structures such as “because they need the job” and “although accepting difficult circumstances may sometimes be necessary.” The overall meaning is usually clear, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “a bad situations” has a number-agreement error, “some people would rather to accept” uses an incorrect verb pattern, and “they always wants” has subject–verb disagreement. There are also sentence-boundary and punctuation problems, including the fragment “Such as being in bad working conditions” and the comma splice in “I was working in a client service because I needed money, I was working in bad conditions.” Review verb patterns after “would rather,” agreement, and sentence boundaries; then proofread to make complex sentences more controlled.

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