Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is widely obseved that, few individuals thinks that it is best way to accepts a bad stiuation like unsatisfactory job or shortage fo money and some poeple believe that it is try to improve such situations. This essay will discuss the both views and give your opinion.

To begin with the first and foremost notion that,Firstly, people thinks that the bad situation is good for complete family needs and face more problems to build more independent. To elaborate this, many people work in office and factory ,so some time these face more issues such as job difficulties and shortage of money ,so few people leave to this job,but some people cannot leave to this jobs. The problems are not permannat every problem are temporary ,and humans face bad situation to complete the family needs and more peoblem to build a humans more confident in daliy life.For example, the fans company face more problems like more draw back ,so the workers cannot leave to this jobs and solve to this issues and workers complete the family needs to easliy.

Shiftly towards the later notion that,Secondly, to try to improve such situations and try learn new skills and cannot whole time to only one jobs ,so these try to other jobs.To elaborate this, many people work only one jobs and cannot try to learn new things ,so these cannot get high state in your life ,so some individuals work in many jobs. For instance, many people works in many place ,so these cannot face problem in your life and remained this life easily.

In conclusion, the bad situation is good to face more problems in your life ,so these good to more confident and some time family needs is more important ,yet work only one jobs is not good ,so these work many jobs and learn new skills .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response attempts both sides of the question and gives a concluding view: it suggests that people may endure hardship to meet family needs, while also arguing that learning skills or changing jobs can improve circumstances. However, the discussion is only partially developed. The first view is presented mainly as a reason to tolerate difficulties, but the explanation that problems are temporary is not clearly connected to accepting an unsatisfactory job or financial hardship. The second view is also unclear: the claim that people should work in many jobs is not explained as a practical way to improve their situation. The conclusion combines these points without stating a clear, consistent preference. Develop each view with a specific reason and example, then state your own position directly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a recognisable essay structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “To begin with,” “Secondly,” and “In conclusion” help identify the sections. However, progression within paragraphs is difficult to follow because ideas are repeated or linked mechanically with “so” and “to elaborate this.” For example, the first body paragraph moves from family needs to workplace problems, temporary difficulties and a company example without making the relationships clear. References such as “these” and “this job” also leave the reader unsure who or what is meant. Organise each body paragraph around one main claim, explain it in a logical sequence, and use clearer references and a wider range of linking methods.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “shortage of money,” “family needs,” “temporary,” “confident,” and “learn new skills.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning difficult to understand. Phrases such as “build a humans more confident,” “get high state in your life,” and “remained this life easily” are not natural ways to express the intended ideas. There are also frequent spelling errors, including “obseved,” “stiuation,” “permannat,” and “daliy,” which reduce clarity. Build a more accurate set of phrases for discussing job security, financial pressure and career development, and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The essay attempts both simple and longer sentence forms, often joining ideas with “because,” “and” or “so,” but control is weak and errors frequently make sentences hard to follow. Subject–verb agreement is inconsistent, as in “few individuals thinks” and “many people works”; infinitive and verb forms are also faulty in “it is best way to accepts” and “try learn new skills.” Articles, plurals and sentence boundaries are often missing or inaccurate, as in “work in office and factory” and “cannot leave to this jobs.” Commas and spacing around punctuation are also inconsistent. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using controlled subordinate clauses; check agreement, articles and verb patterns in each sentence.

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