Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

"The bar chart illustrates different export earning according to the 2015 to 2016 categories.

The export earnings of petrolum products was higher 60billion$in 2015 as compared to the

export earnings in 2016.

The export earnings in engineered goods in 2015 was higher approximately 55%$

as compared to

the export products of 2016.The eningeered goods in 2016 was 60%$ was higher than 2015.

The Germs and jewellery in 2015 was 45%$ higher as compared to the export earnings of

2016.

And the export earning of agricultural products of 30%$in 2016 was higher than export

earnings in agricultural products was 32 billion $.And finally,the textiles in 2015 was higher

of the export earnings.Overall, the engineered goods was the highest.And the textiles were

Lowest.And the product category of different percentages values in 2015 to 2016.The

petroum products were 3%,Engineered goods were 8.5%,the gems and jewellery were

5.18%,The agricultural prodcuts were 0.81%,Finally textiles were 15.24%.Overall,the

engineered goods were highest and pertroluem products were lowest."

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the chart’s subject and include several relevant figures, including the approximate 2015 petroleum value and the percentage changes. However, the account only partially reports the main features, and some comparisons are inaccurate or unclear. For example, petroleum earnings rose from about $61 billion to $63 billion, but you say the 2015 figure was higher without clearly stating the 2016 value. The agricultural figures are reversed, and the textiles comparison is incomplete. The overview also incorrectly calls engineered goods the highest category; petroleum products were highest in both years. To strengthen the response, give a clear overview of the overall pattern and accurately compare the leading and changing categories.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is some attempt to organise the response, with an opening, category-by-category details and an overall statement. However, the information does not progress clearly: the engineered-goods figures are repeated and contradictory, and the agricultural comparison is difficult to follow. Several line breaks interrupt sentences, while connectors such as “And finally” and repeated uses of “Overall” do not create a clear structure. The reader also has to infer which year some figures refer to. Group the information into a short introduction, an overview, and logically ordered detail paragraphs. Use clear comparisons and references to the years so each point connects smoothly to the next.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant task vocabulary such as “export earnings,” “engineered goods,” and “percentage values,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings make the report harder to understand, including “petrolum,” “eningeered,” “Germs and jewellery,” and “prodcuts.” The repeated phrase “export earnings” also makes the writing sound repetitive. Some expressions, such as “higher 60billion$,” are not natural ways to describe chart data. Use standard category names and concise comparison language, for example, “stood at,” “increased to,” and “compared with.” Check spelling carefully, especially for the labels copied from the chart.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts simple comparisons, but grammatical control is inconsistent and sentence structures are mostly basic. Errors in agreement and verb forms appear in phrases such as “The export earnings … was higher” and “the textiles in 2015 was higher.” Comparisons are often incomplete, as in “as compared to the export earnings in 2016,” where the relevant value or relationship is not clearly expressed. Punctuation and spacing also interfere with readability, for example, “Finally,the” and “60billion$in.” Practise complete comparative sentences with a clear subject, verb and both values, such as “Petroleum exports rose from about $61 billion in 2015 to $63 billion in 2016.”

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