Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

"The bar chart illustrates the country's export worth in different sectors.

The petroluem products was 59$in 2015 lower as compared to the pertroluem products in

2016.WhileThe engineered goods in 2015 was approximately 60$higher as compared to the

engineered good in 2016.Morever the gems and jewellery in 2015 was higher 40$in 2015

as compared to the gems and jewellery in 2016.The textiles in 20$were lowered as compared to the textiles in 2016.The percentage changes in values of [redacted phone] which are

petroluem products was 3%lower than engineered good.The engineered goods was 8.5%higher than gems and jewellery.The gems and jewellery were 5.18%higher than agriculutralproducts.The agricultural products was 0.81%lower than textiles 15.24%.Overall,the enginerring goods were highest,and the agricultural products were lowest.These were the different changes which were shown of 2015 to 2016 of different pertrleum products,engineered goods,gems and jewllery,agricultural products and textiles.These changes were present in 2016.But on 2015 these changes remained same."

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart as showing export values and mention all five categories, with some relevant comparisons, such as petroleum products rising and gems and jewellery falling. However, the account is incomplete and several comparisons are inaccurate or unclear: engineered goods are described as higher in 2015, although the chart shows about $57 billion in 2015 and $62 billion in 2016; agricultural products are not the lowest in both years, and textiles have the largest percentage increase. The overview that engineered goods were highest and agricultural products lowest does not accurately summarise the main pattern. The response also falls one word short of the required minimum. To improve, give a clear overview of the main trends and report the key figures and percentage changes accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response follows a basic sequence, moving from the bar chart to the percentage changes and then to an overall statement. This gives the reader some sense of the information being discussed. However, ideas are not arranged into clear paragraphs, and many comparisons run together in long, crowded sentences. Connectors such as “Moreover,” “Overall,” and “But” are used, but the relationships they signal are sometimes unclear; for example, the final sentence about changes remaining the same in 2015 conflicts with the preceding discussion. Repeated category names also make the progression difficult to follow. Separate the overview from the detailed comparisons, group related categories, and use linking phrases only where they accurately show contrast or addition.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “export,” “percentage changes,” “higher,” and the names of the product categories, so the reader can generally identify the subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings reduce clarity, including “petroluem,” “pertroluem,” “enginerring,” and “jewllery.” Phrases such as “export worth” and “were lowered” are also awkward for describing chart values, while “higher than” is repeatedly used where a direct comparison between years would be clearer. Aim for accurate, varied terms such as “export earnings,” “rose to,” “fell to,” and “accounted for,” and check spelling carefully. This would make the report more precise and less repetitive.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to compare values using past-tense clauses, but sentence structures are mostly simple or joined in ways that are difficult to control. Errors in agreement and sentence construction appear in examples such as “The petroluem products was” and “The engineered goods in 2015 was.” Several sentences also lack clear boundaries or punctuation, as in “2016.WhileThe engineered goods,” which makes the relationships between clauses hard to follow. The final statement, “But on 2015 these changes remained same,” has an unclear grammatical structure. Practise forming concise comparison sentences with accurate subject–verb agreement and past-tense verbs, and use full stops and commas to separate each point.

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