Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given bar chart illustrates the exports of one country,s of different product,s betweenthe two years from 2015 to2016.The rateof petrolium products wastouch to the peak in both years.

Firstly, The rate of petrolium products and the engineered goods rate was take less difference the first product rate was reach sixtyand the other was fifty eight billion,s. while the gem,s and jewellery product was reach on 41 billion,s.on the other hand the agriculture and textiles product reached on 30 and 28 billion,s in the 2015

secondly, the petrolium product ,engineered goods and gems and jewellery was slightly move on downward side the products export was 60, 58 and 41 billion,s. onthe other hand thew agriculture and textiles product was reach 30 and 27 percent.

thirdly all the products was contain some changes in the this two years value the petrolium product take the change was 3 person and engineered product change in both year was 8.5 percent and wgems je

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s subject and report several relevant categories, including petroleum, engineered goods, gems and jewellery, agriculture, and textiles. However, the response gives no clear overview of the main features, and the account is incomplete: the final sentence breaks off after “wgems je,” leaving several table changes unreported. Some figures and trends are also inaccurate or unclear. For example, petroleum exports rise from about 61 to 63 billion, rather than moving downward, and engineered goods rise from about 57 to 62 billion. The textiles figures are also substantially misreported. To improve, state the overall pattern first—petroleum remained the largest export, while textiles had the strongest percentage growth—and then compare the main increases and the decline in gems and jewellery accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response using “Firstly,” “secondly,” and “thirdly,” and the writing broadly moves from category figures to percentage changes. However, this progression is difficult to follow because the paragraphs do not clearly separate the chart’s values from the table’s percentage changes, and the final section is unfinished. Connections such as “on the other hand” are used where the contrast is not always clear, while repeated references to products and rates make it hard to track which year or category is being discussed. Group the information into a brief overview and two focused paragraphs, and use clear references such as “in 2015” and “by 2016” to guide the reader.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “exports,” “petroleum products,” “engineered goods,” and “percentage,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “rate … was touch to the peak,” “move on downward side,” and “take the change.” Repeated use of “product” and “rate” also reduces precision; the chart reports export values or earnings, not rates. Spelling and word-form errors, including “petrolium” and “person” for “percent,” further affect clarity. Build a more accurate set of chart terms and use them consistently, for example “export value,” “increased,” “declined,” and “percentage change.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to form longer sentences with contrasts, but sentence structures are often incomplete or difficult to interpret. Verb forms and agreement are frequent problems: “the engineered goods rate was take” and “all the products was contain” do not form grammatical clauses. Tense and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, as in “the gem,s and jewellery product was reach on 41 billion,s.on the other hand.” Commas and full stops are often missing or misplaced, which makes the relationships between ideas unclear. Practise writing complete, simple comparison sentences first, such as “Petroleum exports rose from about $61 billion in 2015 to $63 billion in 2016.” Then add a limited number of correctly formed contrast clauses.

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