Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-07-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The bar graph demonstrates billions of money spent in exports of vary groups in 2015 and 2016. The table chart compared to 2015, how much percentage change in 2016.
To begin with, there were three class of exports reported almost similar. Petroleum products accounted almost 60 billions respectively, and noticeably agricultural products were close to 30 billions. Moreover, gems and jewellery were accounted almost close but not same, in 2015 the revenue of this categery was 41 billions, but in 2016 it was 40 billions respectively. Furthermore, the value of engineered goods were 58 billions in 2015 and 61 billions in 2016, and textiles were accounted 25% in 2015 and later one year the value increased to 31 billions.
However, 2016 value of each class changed, compared to 2015. Textiles accounted the highest percentage of increment, 15.24% respectively. Additionally, engineered goods was 8.5% growth and 5.18% value droped down in 2016. Petroleum products and agriculture products were got tiny growth, 3% and 0.81%, respectevly.
Overall, it is apparent that the earnings of this 5 groups was almost similar but not same. However, in 2016 four categories got increment in earnings, but gems and jewellery got 5.18% decrement.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the data, including the values for 2015 and 2016 and the percentage changes. However, the reporting is inconsistent and contains factual inaccuracies. For instance, you state that textiles accounted for 25% in 2015, but the chart shows 25 billion. Additionally, you mention a 5.18% drop for gems and jewellery, which is correct, but your description of the other categories is somewhat muddled. To improve, ensure you clearly distinguish between currency values (billions) and percentages, and double-check your data extraction to ensure accuracy when reporting figures.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'To begin with', 'Moreover', and 'Overall' to link ideas. However, the flow is sometimes hindered by awkward phrasing and repetitive sentence structures. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the second paragraph where the connection between the categories and the figures is not always smooth. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task, but there are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward collocations. For example, 'billions of money spent in exports of vary groups' is unnatural; 'various categories' would be better. You also use 'respectively' incorrectly throughout the text, as it is used to link two sets of data, not to end a sentence describing a single figure. Spelling errors like 'categery', 'droped', and 'respectevly' also detract from the overall quality of the writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures. While there are attempts at complex sentences, they often contain grammatical errors, such as 'Petroleum products and agriculture products were got tiny growth', which is grammatically incorrect. There are frequent issues with subject-verb agreement and article usage. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction before attempting more complex structures. Pay close attention to verb forms and ensure that your sentences are complete and grammatically sound.
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