Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar graph illustrates the value of various categories that the country's exported during 2015 and 2016. While the table depicts the comparison change in 2016 and 2015 in each category.
Overall, the bar graph shows that the earnings of petroleum products, engineered goods, gems and jewelry, agricultural products and textiles are gradually decreasing in a year. In terms of the value percentage of these products, the table recorded that it is fluctuating in a year.
On the other hand, the bar graph compares the earning of the various exports in 2015 and 2016 it shows that petroleum products and engineered goods records 60 billion dollars in the year 2015 and increased in the year 2016 for almost 65 billion dollars for petroleum products and for engineered good it decrease and records over 50 billion dollars. Moreover, it shows the decreasing export items in the year 2015 the gems and jewelry records almost 50 billion dollars while it agricultural and textile are gradually decreasing. The agricultural products are only 30 billion dollars, and it has the same record for the year 2016 while the textile is with over 20 billion dollars and increased over a year for almost 30 billion dollars.
In addition, the table displays the percentage of values in the export products. The highest value is for textiles with 15.24 percent, and it is increasing over the year. Engineered goods is the second to the highest exported products with the value of 8.5 percent for the year 2015 and increased in the year 2016. In terms of Gems and Jewelry as well as petroleum products it records that there are small percentage of exporting these items the gems and jewelry have 5.18 percent and it is decreasing over time, and petroleum has 3 percent, but it is increasing over the year. Lastly is the agricultural products with just 0.81 percent value.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the task by summarizing the main features of the chart and table. However, there are significant inaccuracies in the data reporting. For example, you state that petroleum products increased to 'almost 65 billion' and engineered goods decreased to 'over 50 billion', which misinterprets the provided figures. Furthermore, the description of the table is confusing; you describe the percentage change as 'value percentage', which is a misinterpretation of the data provided in the table. While you attempt to cover all categories, the lack of precision in reporting the data prevents a higher score. To improve, ensure you carefully cross-reference the visual data with your text to avoid factual errors.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'On the other hand', and 'In addition' to link ideas. However, the progression within paragraphs is sometimes disjointed, particularly in the third paragraph where the transition between describing different export items is abrupt. Additionally, some referencing is unclear, such as the phrase 'it is fluctuating in a year', where the antecedent is ambiguous. Improving the flow between sentences and ensuring that cohesive devices are used to connect related ideas more naturally would enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'illustrates', 'depicts', 'fluctuating', and 'categories'. However, there are instances of imprecise word choice and collocation errors, such as 'the country's exported' (should be 'exports') and 'records over 50 billion dollars' (repetitive use of 'records'). You also struggle with accurate terminology regarding the data, confusing 'value' with 'percentage change'. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensure that your word choices are contextually appropriate for describing statistical data.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'the country's exported' (incorrect verb form), 'the table depicts the comparison change in 2016 and 2015' (awkward phrasing), and 'it agricultural and textile are gradually decreasing' (missing subject/article). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are issues with sentence boundaries and comma usage. While the meaning is usually clear, the frequency of these errors suggests a need for more careful proofreading and a better grasp of subject-verb agreement and article usage.
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