Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart illustrates about the value of one country export in various categories in 2015 and 2016. On the other hand the table chart show about the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 in compared to 2015.
By having a cursory glance, it is vivid that the petroleum products in year 2015 the earning is about 60.5 billion dollar. While in 2016 the earning is about 62 billion dollar. In other sector like in engineered goods the export earning is about 57 billion dollar in 2015. whilst in 2016 the earning is about 61 billion dollar approximately. Further in gems and Jewellery export earning was about 43 billion dollar in 2015. however in 2016 the earning is about 40 billion dollar. As well as in 2016 the earning was same in agriculture products and textile was about 31 billion dollar but in 2015 both have different earnings.
Moving further it is lucid that the percent change in values in different categories such as in petroleum products was about 3% and engineered goods was 8.5% in [redacted phone].well the textile was about 15.24%
To conclude the petroleum products had more earning in [redacted phone].Change in value the textile have maximum percentage.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the data, but the analysis is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear overview. While you identify specific figures for petroleum and engineered goods, the summary of the table data is incomplete, as you only mention three categories out of the five provided. The conclusion is also quite brief and does not effectively synthesise the trends. To improve, ensure you group data logically rather than listing figures for each category individually, and provide a more comprehensive overview that highlights the most significant trends or contrasts across both the chart and the table.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is hindered by repetitive sentence structures and awkward transitions. Phrases like 'Moving further' and 'By having a cursory glance' feel forced and do not always connect ideas smoothly. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes inaccurate, such as using 'On the other hand' to introduce a table that complements rather than contrasts with the bar chart. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear focus would significantly enhance the flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and variety expected at higher bands. You rely heavily on repetitive phrasing, such as 'the earning is about', which appears multiple times. There are also some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'table chart' (it is either a table or a chart) and 'vivid' (which is not the most appropriate adjective for describing data). To achieve a higher score, try to use a wider range of synonyms for 'increase', 'decrease', and 'value', and focus on more natural collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation. Issues include incorrect article usage ('the petroleum products'), subject-verb agreement errors ('the table chart show'), and awkward phrasing ('in compared to'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several sentences starting with lowercase letters or lacking proper sentence boundaries. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to affect the clarity of your writing. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for small grammatical slips will help improve your score.
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