Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar graph compares the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016, while the table compares the percentage change in value in each category of exports in one year ([redacted phone]).
Overall, the export earning in year 2015 all the product category was low in $billions expect the Gems and Jewelry, it was on top in year 2015then in year 2016. Conversely, all the other products like petroleum products, engineered goods, agricultural products and textiles was lower in year 2015 than in year 2016.
Firstly, in year 2015 the Petroleum products was approximately at 60 $ billion but it had an incremate in year 2016 up to 3%. Moving forward to Engineered goods it rise to 8.5% then i was in 2015 nearly 55 $ billion. Significantly noticeable that the Gems and Jewelry was high in year 2015 and decreased up to 5.18% of selling in year 2016.
Furthermore, the products of agricultural and textiles both were amplify to 0.81% and 15.24% in year 2016 than from 2015 which around 30 $ billion and 25 $ billion.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the data, including the export values and percentage changes. However, the analysis is somewhat inconsistent. For instance, the description of the Gems and Jewelry category is slightly confusing, and the comparison between the bar chart and the table could be more precise. While the main trends are identified, the report lacks a clear, analytical overview that synthesizes the data effectively. Some figures are presented without clear context, and the relationship between the two years is occasionally muddled by grammatical issues, which hinders the clarity of the reporting.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'Moving forward to' and 'Significantly noticeable that'. The logical progression between sentences is sometimes interrupted by awkward phrasing, making the flow feel disjointed. While there is an attempt to use linking words, they are not always used with the flexibility required for a higher band. Referencing is generally clear, but the overall structure could be improved by better signposting of the data comparisons.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'incremate' instead of 'increase', 'rise' used incorrectly as a past tense verb, and 'amplify' used where 'increased' or 'grew' would be more appropriate. The phrasing 'selling in year 2016' is also unnatural. While the student attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary, the errors in word formation and collocation occasionally impede the reader's understanding of the specific data points being discussed.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Subject-verb agreement is a recurring issue, for example, 'all the product category was low' and 'textiles was lower'. There are also errors in tense usage, such as 'it rise to 8.5% then i was in 2015', and incorrect preposition usage. These errors are noticeable and sometimes make the sentences difficult to parse. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of control over basic grammatical structures prevents a higher score.
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