Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given bar graph demonstrates the comparison between different stuffs in given two years 2017and 2015.
Overall it can be clearly analysis that petroleum and engineered materials recorded highest amount while, textiles earn least amount of money.
To commence with, the petroleum products earn the huge profits approximately 60 billions in 2016 . While the textile earn least amount of money around 32 billions. Moreover, agricultural products recorded same amount of money like 31 billions in 2015,2016
Moving ahead, the second highest catagory was engineered good which was recorded 60 billions in2016. There were smallest differences between gems and jewellery in different year likely 40,and 41 billion.moreover , earning money change into value the textiles represent higher around 15.24%and lowest by agriculture stuff. Petroleum value only 3%in both year
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly limits the depth of the analysis. While you have identified some main features, the report is incomplete. You have misread the data in several instances (e.g., citing 2017 instead of 2016, and incorrectly stating that petroleum products earned 60 billion in 2016 when the chart shows a different figure). Furthermore, the comparison between the bar chart and the table is not fully integrated, and the lack of sufficient detail prevents a clear overview of the trends. To improve, ensure you accurately transcribe data points and provide a more comprehensive summary of all categories.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is hindered by inaccurate data reporting and awkward phrasing. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'To commence with' and 'Moving ahead', but they are sometimes used mechanically or inappropriately. The referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the two years. To improve, focus on using transition signals that naturally link your ideas and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus. Improving the clarity of your sentences will help the overall flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'stuffs', 'amount', and 'money'. There are several instances of inaccurate word choice, such as 'engineered good' instead of 'engineered goods' and 'catagory' (spelling error). The use of 'earning money change into value' is unclear and does not accurately describe the percentage change shown in the table. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'experienced a growth of', and 'accounted for'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'textile earn'), incorrect tense usage, and missing articles. Sentence structures are generally simple, and attempts at more complex sentences are often marred by punctuation errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'There were smallest differences between gems and jewellery in different year likely 40,and 41 billion.' To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct verb tenses and pluralisation, before attempting more complex structures. Proofreading for basic punctuation and spelling errors is also essential.
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