Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
THE BARGRAPH ILLUSTRATES THE WORTH OF ONE COUNTRY'S TRANSPORT IN PETROLEUM PRODUCTS, AGRICULTURAL PRODUCTS AND TEXTILES IN YEAR 2015 AND 2016. THE CHART ILLABORATE THE YEARLY REVANUE OF ALL PRODUCT'S EXPORTATION HAD DONE IN 2016 AND COMPARED IT WITH 2015.
START WITH THE HIGHEST SEALED THING AND IT IS PERTOLEUM PRODUCTS IN BOTH YEAR IT EARNED MORE THEN 60 BILLIONS IT ONLY INCREASED BY THREE PERCENTAGE IN 2016. AFTER THIS ENGINEERED GOODS WAS ON THE SECOND RANK AND IT WAS 54 BILLION IN 2015 AND IT GROWN BY 8.5 PERCENTAGE AND BECAME 62 BILLION DOLLERS IN 2016. FURTHERMORE, GEMS AND JEWELLERY'S REVENUE WAS LESS THEN PETROLEUM PRODUCTS AND ENGINEERED GOODS AND IT WAS ALMOST 46 BILLION DOLLARS IN 2015 AND IT DICRESED BY 5.18 SO IT WAS 41 BILLION IN 2016.
MOREOVER, AGRICULTURAL PRODUCTS TURNOVER WAS ALMOST SAME IN BOTH YEAR AND IT WAS 31 AND 32 BILLION DOLLARS, IN 2015 AND 2016.
LASTLY, TAXTILES HAD LEAST EARNING AS COMPARED TO OTHER PRODUCTS AND IT WAD 26 BILLIONS IN 2015 THEN IT INCREASED BY 15 PERCENTAGE AND IN 2016 IT WAS 32 IN THE YEAR OF 2016.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all categories and provides data for both years, including the percentage changes. However, the overview is weak; it merely restates the prompt rather than highlighting the main trends or significant differences. The report is largely a list of figures rather than a synthesis of information. For example, while the student mentions the highest and lowest earners, they do not effectively group the data to show clear trends, such as the general growth in most sectors versus the decline in gems and jewellery. To reach a higher band, the student should provide a clear summary of the overall trends in the introduction or as a separate overview paragraph.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive (e.g., 'After this', 'Furthermore', 'Moreover', 'Lastly'). There are also issues with logical flow; the transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is abrupt. While the information is generally grouped by category, the lack of sophisticated linking words makes the progression feel disjointed. Improving the variety of cohesive devices and ensuring they are used to connect ideas rather than just list them would improve the score.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several spelling errors, such as 'BARGRAPH' (bar chart), 'ILLABORATE' (elaborate/illustrate), 'REVANUE' (revenue), 'DICRESED' (decreased), and 'TAXTILES' (textiles). The student relies on basic terminology like 'worth', 'thing', and 'grown'. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequent spelling mistakes and the limited range of vocabulary prevent the response from reaching a higher band. Using more precise academic vocabulary, such as 'fluctuated', 'experienced a decline', or 'remained stable', would enhance the quality of the writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. Examples include 'THE CHART ILLABORATE THE YEARLY REVANUE OF ALL PRODUCT'S EXPORTATION HAD DONE', 'IT ONLY INCREASED BY THREE PERCENTAGE', and 'IT WAD 26 BILLIONS'. There are also issues with subject-verb agreement and article usage. While the meaning is usually understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and punctuation indicates that the student has not yet mastered these structures. Focusing on proofreading for basic errors and subject-verb consistency is essential.
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