Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In the given graph they relates earning of different products in different centuries. In this graph there is information of the sales of Petroleum products, Engineering goods, Gems and jewelry, Agriculture products and at last Textiles,

At first we see that there was a little bit high sales of Petroleum products in 2016 than 2015 , than they discovered that there was far more sales of Engineered goods in the era of 2016 in related to 2016, but, in term of Gems and jewelry we highlighted that there was less purchasing of Gems and jewelry in 2016 than 2015, So, after this we continuing our process and disclosed that there was a little bit improvement in the shipping of Agriculture product in 2016 than 2015 and than at the last there was very good ratio of sales of Textile product in 2016 in term of 2015.

In this graph we acknowledge that there were many ups and downs in these two years but mostly we witness that there was such a improvement.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to summarize the data but fails to provide a clear overview or accurately report the figures. The student describes the trends in a very informal and repetitive manner, using phrases like 'at first we see' and 'after this we continuing our process'. Crucially, the response lacks specific data points (values or percentages), which is a requirement for Task 1. The analysis is vague, referring to 'little bit high' or 'very good ratio' rather than citing the actual export values or percentage changes provided in the prompt. Consequently, the main features are not effectively highlighted or compared.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into three short paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is weak. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often inappropriate, such as 'at last' used to introduce a list, or 'than they discovered that', which is not suitable for a report. The referencing is unclear, and the flow between sentences is disjointed. The conclusion is repetitive and does not effectively summarize the information presented in the body paragraphs. The overall structure lacks the logical flow expected in an academic report.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic terms like 'sales', 'products', and 'graph', and uses them incorrectly in context (e.g., 'earning of different products' instead of 'export values'). There is a lack of precision, with phrases like 'little bit high' and 'very good ratio' failing to convey the specific nature of the data. The word choice is often unnatural, such as 'shipping of Agriculture product' and 'in the era of 2016'. The range is insufficient to convey the information accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('they relates'), incorrect prepositions ('in term of'), and awkward sentence structures ('than they discovered that there was far more sales'). The use of tenses is inconsistent, and there is a lack of complex sentence structures. Punctuation is also problematic, with unnecessary commas and run-on sentences. The errors are frequent and pervasive throughout the text, indicating a lack of control over basic grammatical rules.

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