Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given bar graph illustrates the value of one country's transportation in various categories during in the period of 2015 and 2016. And second the table illustrates the percentage change in values in categories of export in 2016 compared with 2015.
Overall, petroleum products and engineered goods was maximum in export earnings and textiles are at the least in earnings in export, Whereas gems and jewellery was decreasing in the percentage change in values in the period of 2015 to 2016 and rest categories was growing up in percentage change in values.
In the evident, textiles and agriculture products having equal export earning in 2016, 30 billion dollors. However, petroleum products and engineered goods was earned in exporting nearly 65 billion dollors, whereas gems and jewellery was average in earning something 42 billion dollors.
Secondly, gems and jewellery was at the decreasing level 5.18% percent and highly in textiles increase in percentage change in values 15.24% percent, rest all product categories are also at the increasing level in petroleum products 3%, engineered goods 8.5%, and agriculture products 0.81%
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
You have successfully identified the main features of the data, including the highest and lowest export categories and the trends in percentage change. However, the response lacks precision in reporting the data. For example, you state that textiles and agriculture products had 'equal export earning in 2016, 30 billion dollars', but the chart shows these values are distinct. Furthermore, the description of the trends is somewhat repetitive and lacks a clear, analytical structure. To improve, ensure you accurately transcribe the figures from the chart and group the data more logically to highlight key comparisons rather than listing them category by category.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as starting a sentence with 'In the evident' or 'And second'. The logical progression between ideas is sometimes hindered by these awkward transitions. While you attempt to use linking words like 'However' and 'Whereas', they are not always used to create a smooth flow of information. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking phrases that connect your ideas more naturally and improve the overall flow between sentences.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is somewhat limited and repetitive. You frequently use phrases like 'percentage change in values' and 'growing up', which are not the most precise terms for describing statistical trends. There are also some minor errors in word choice, such as 'maximum in export earnings' instead of 'the highest export earnings'. To improve, try to incorporate more varied and precise vocabulary related to data description, such as 'surged', 'declined', 'fluctuated', or 'accounted for', to demonstrate a more sophisticated range of language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('petroleum products and engineered goods was maximum', 'rest categories was growing up') and awkward phrasing ('In the evident'). Additionally, there are punctuation and spelling errors, such as 'dollors'. While these errors do not completely prevent communication, they are frequent enough to distract the reader. Focusing on basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring correct tense usage will significantly improve the clarity and accuracy of your writing.
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