Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
the picture below shows the value of one country's open in various categories during 2015 to 2016. the chart shows the percentage change in the category of information in 2016 compared with 2015. the graph shows export earnings 2015 to 2016. the chart shows product category in five steps first steps petroleum products, second engineered goods, third steps gems and jewelry and fourth steps agricultural products then last steps textiles.
overall, the export earnings $billions and product category so first steps petroleum products billions 2015 in 60 and 65 billion in 2016, second steps engineered goods in billions555in 2015 years then second years 62 billion, third gems and jewelry in the first years 45 billion and 2016 years 40 billion gems and jewelry very low comparisons petroleum and engineered goods.
the fourth steps agricultural products in 32 billion in 2015 years and 35 billion 2016 years then last steps textiles in 25 billion 2015 years and 32 billion 2016 years. very low product category the textiles 25 and32 . very up petroleum products.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to cover the data provided, but it fails to effectively summarize the main features or make meaningful comparisons. The writing is largely a list of figures rather than an analytical report. Crucially, the student completely ignores the table showing the percentage change, which was a core part of the task instructions. The overview is weak and lacks a clear synthesis of the trends. The information is presented in a repetitive, mechanical way, such as 'first steps', 'second steps', which does not demonstrate the ability to select and highlight key data points effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks logical organization and progression. The paragraphs are poorly structured, and the use of cohesive devices is extremely limited and repetitive (e.g., 'first steps', 'second steps', 'last steps'). There is no effective use of linking words to connect ideas or compare the data points. The text reads as a series of disjointed sentences rather than a cohesive report. The lack of proper punctuation and paragraphing further hinders the flow of information, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the years 2015 and 2016.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive. The student uses 'steps' and 'years' incorrectly throughout the text, and there is a lack of variety in reporting verbs or comparative language. Phrases like 'very low comparisons' and 'very up' are non-standard and demonstrate a lack of control over academic register. The student struggles to use appropriate terminology for describing data, such as 'increase', 'decrease', 'fluctuate', or 'growth'. The range is insufficient to convey the information with any degree of precision or academic style.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There is a lack of sentence variety; most sentences are simple and poorly constructed. Issues include missing articles, incorrect verb forms, and fragmented sentence structures (e.g., 'in billions555in 2015 years'). Punctuation is largely absent or misused, and there is no evidence of complex sentence structures. The errors are pervasive and occur in almost every sentence, which significantly affects the clarity of the report and the reader's ability to interpret the data accurately.
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