Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart illustrates the data of exports earning of a country in five categories in two different era of 2015 and 2016.The table provide data regarding the change in the proportion of these five categories in two years.
Overall, exports in four categories increase in 2016 but there is one exceptional in which exports surpassed in 2015.
In 2015, petroleum products had 60 billions dollar but in 2016 it increased by 3% and oved to around 62 billion dollar. Engineered goods followed the same pattern of increment, as around 55 billion dollar in 2015 but incresed by 8.5% and jumped to 60 billion dollar in 2016.The exceptional case in Gems where exports decline by 5.18% and around 45 billion dollar in 2015 as comapred to around 40 billion dollar in 2015.
There was slight change in agriculture products where it was around 30 billion dollar in 2015 but mionor increment of 0.81% and moved to 33 billion dollar in 2016. The highest surge by proportion was in textile where increment of 15.24% and exports jumped from around 20% in 2015 to around 35 billion dollar in 2016.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main features and making relevant comparisons. You successfully highlighted the overall trend and provided specific data points for each category. However, there are some inaccuracies in the data reporting. For instance, you stated that Gems declined by 5.18% from 45 billion to 40 billion, but the text mentions 2015 twice instead of 2016. Additionally, the description of textile exports contains a confusion between percentage and currency units, stating '20% in 2015' instead of 20 billion. Improving the precision of data extraction is essential for a higher band score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response is logically organized with a clear introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate different categories. Cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'In 2015', and 'The exceptional case' help guide the reader through the information. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by minor mechanical errors and some awkward phrasing, such as 'there is one exceptional in which'. While the progression is generally clear, the use of cohesive devices could be more varied to improve the overall fluency of the text.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'illustrates', 'proportion', 'increment', and 'surge'. However, there are several word-choice errors and spelling mistakes, such as 'oved' instead of 'moved', 'incresed', 'mionor', and 'comapred'. These errors do not impede communication, but they indicate a need for more careful proofreading. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise collocations and ensure that technical terms are used accurately in context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'exports in four categories increase' should be 'increased') and prepositional errors (e.g., 'exceptional in which' should be 'exception where'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods. These errors occur frequently but rarely impede the reader's understanding. To improve, focus on consistent tense usage and refining sentence structure to reduce minor errors.
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