Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given bar chart below illustrate the export during 2015 and 2016 in country. Shows the percentage changed in each category of exports in 2016 as compared with 2015 overall.
First of all given bar chart shows the petroleum products export which are increases by 3% than last year 2015. Secondly engineer goods are affectively increased 8.5% of the total from 2015 to 2016 which means these types of goods play important role in country's export system. Gems and jewelries from the export bar chart fell down about 5.18% of the total from 2015 to 2016. The country's exports in the year of 2015 to the year 2016 agricultural products export increased 0.81% of total last year that means country need to improve their agricultural economy. Addition to this the textile increased on large scale of 15.24% of the total from 2015 till the year 2016 which is very impressive.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the data, including the categories of exports and their percentage changes. However, the overview is weak; it merely repeats the prompt rather than highlighting the most significant trends, such as the overall growth in most sectors versus the decline in gems and jewelry. The analysis is somewhat mechanical, listing figures without sufficient synthesis or comparison between categories. To improve, you should group the data more effectively (e.g., grouping growing sectors versus declining ones) and provide a clear, concise summary of the main trends in the introduction or as a separate overview paragraph.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organised into a single paragraph, which makes it difficult to follow. While there is some attempt at logical sequencing using transition words like 'First of all', 'Secondly', and 'Addition to this', the lack of paragraph breaks hinders the overall structure. Cohesive devices are used, but they are somewhat repetitive and mechanical. To reach a higher band, you must use clear paragraphing to separate the introduction, the overview, and the body paragraphs. Additionally, ensure that referencing is clear; for instance, 'the country's exports' is vague when referring to the specific data points provided in the chart.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. You rely on basic verbs like 'increased' and 'fell down' repeatedly. There are also some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'affectively increased' (likely meant 'effectively' or 'significantly') and 'on large scale of'. To improve, try to use a wider range of synonyms for change, such as 'surged', 'plummeted', 'experienced a marginal rise', or 'witnessed a decline'. Avoid informal phrasing like 'fell down' in an academic report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('chart illustrate', 'products export which are increases'), missing articles ('in country'), and awkward sentence construction ('The country's exports in the year of 2015 to the year 2016 agricultural products export increased'). The range of structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structure, ensuring correct verb tenses, and using articles appropriately. Incorporating more complex structures, such as relative clauses or participial phrases, would also help demonstrate a wider grammatical range.
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