Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The bar chart demonstrate the income of export in the year of 2015 and 2016 in various category. Moreover, chart shows the propotion of amounts change through in one year that is 2015 and 2016.
In the first paragraph i am going to explain the chart that about earning from export various products. In 15 and 16 the highest income got in petroleum product that was 60 billions dollors and apporx. 62 billions dollors.. However, the lowest was from textilies in the given years.
In the passage i will describe the chart that is about percentage of value that how was changes during the time that given in chart. Petroleum and engineered products was 3 and 8.5 percent raised in the one year. Not last but the least point is gems and jewellery fall the value that was 5.18% in the given year.
In conclusion, there was just 2 products that got highest income then others.i have seen fluctuation in the goods that was in percentage.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear overview or a meaningful summary of the data. While it mentions some figures, the selection of information is disjointed and lacks a logical focus. The student includes meta-commentary (e.g., 'In the first paragraph i am going to explain...'), which is inappropriate for an academic report. The data interpretation is also inaccurate; for instance, the claim that petroleum products were the highest income is not clearly supported by a comparative analysis of the provided categories. The response lacks a cohesive summary of the main trends, resulting in a fragmented presentation of the data.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the structure is heavily compromised by the inclusion of meta-language, which disrupts the flow of the report. Cohesive devices are used in a very mechanical and often incorrect manner (e.g., 'Not last but the least point is...'). The progression of ideas is unclear, as the student jumps between describing the chart and explaining their own writing process. The referencing is often confusing, making it difficult for the reader to follow the relationship between the categories and the figures presented.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic terms like 'income' and 'products'. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'propotion', 'textilies', and 'dollors'. The student struggles to use precise terminology related to data description, such as 'fluctuation' or 'percentage change', which are used incorrectly or in a vague context. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with the necessary precision required for an Academic Task 1 response.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. Subject-verb agreement is inconsistent (e.g., 'The bar chart demonstrate', 'Petroleum and engineered products was'). There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the simple sentences used are frequently marred by errors in punctuation and tense usage. The misuse of articles and prepositions is pervasive throughout the text. While the meaning can occasionally be inferred, the high frequency of errors makes the writing difficult to read and significantly lowers the overall quality of the response.
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